Kate Flournoy

YES. Exactly. Denholm frightens people with that. If his cover gets blown and someone notices he’s tired, he just laughs at them or ignores them, depending on what mood he’s in, until he can’t possibly go on any longer. 😛

I’ll even make sure G doesn’t find out you said such things.

Thank you. Thank you from the depths of my heart.

*snickers into hand* Don’t mind me, guys. I’m just… yeah. Don’t mind me.

@hope said it, Masyn. 🙂

Believe it or not, I don’t think I’ve ever read a dystopian novel, but I definitely know what the genre is.

I will just say a couple of things though. I would say a dystopian story where the hero loses would have more potential for harm than otherwise. Assuming the hero stood for freedom and virtue etc.— everything…[Read more]

@writefury I suppose that’s true. That is true. 😉

The second person part of me can be very sarcastic too. 😛

Ah, poor Cobalt. In with the bad guys, is he?

I don’t think Denholm’s going to stop being banged up and banged around until the climax finally finally comes and goes. Everything’s gone wrong for the poor guy lately.

It’s okay. He forgives me. 😛

Oh boy this thing made me laugh.

I’ve absolutely nothing to pick on except one thing. I noticed you use subject sentences a LOT. So many of the sentences began with ‘I’ or ‘Me’ or ‘The etc.’ You might try breaking up that pattern a bit— it can sound a little strange.

But otherwise this was great. Sterling has a very distinct personality (so…[Read more]

@hope shhh! *shocked voice* I’m not ready to declare myself in the public market yet! *looks around stealthily, lowers voice* I’ll tell you a secret— you are my guinea-pig.
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Second person. Always second person. 🙂

Okay, wow, thanks for the info. So much of the research I’ve done on indie publishing has come out gloomy and negative, but maybe I just didn’t search deep enough. I’ll definitely keep those books in mind.

Well Daeus. We forgive you.

Sounds like a really, really helpful book. Thanks for sharing! I would love to self-publish… but so many times I’ve heard that self-publishing is a no-no for an author who doesn’t already have a wide reader platform. Maybe that’s not quite as true as it sounds…

Structure nut is very obliging.

Don’t worry, M.K. @the-happy-bookaholic corrects everyone’s grammar on here. It’s nothing personal. 😛

And that poem— wow. As structure goes, I’m don’t know how it was, because I’m not a structure nut (@Daeus is, if you can get him over here) but the words and the raw emotion touched me very… earnestly. You conveyed so much so briefly— or…[Read more]

Well then Denholm would die of poison and the whole world would crumble in ruin, quite simply. 😛

It’s okay— that almost happened anyway, because they were discovered halfway through the camp and he was very, very badly wounded.

Thanks @Daeus and @writefury— the drink is not important. So I conclude it was a good description as descriptions go, but unnecessary, which cancels that out. 😛

Thanks guys! I’ll make it seem less important. 🙂

Gotcha @Hope. Thanks— you’re right.

Quick question for all of you here— how was the description of the drink? Specifically, did I spend too much time on it?

Well thanks! Would you mind posting one of your poems? Or are they all top secret? 😉

Great. Thanks. I’ll definitely be trying it. 🙂

Perhaps you should do a slightly stricter outline for your books.

Hm… yes, more like ‘perhaps you should do an outline for your books.’

Believe me, I’m trying that with the next one. 😛 It can’t hurt to try.