Kate Flournoy

Welcome to the forum, @lightningmouse! We’re an odd assortment of strange objects and creatures and people here at KP, but I do believe you’re the first Stormtrooper to join our ranks! 😉

I love drawing too— and writing, and watching, and reading… in fact the only thing on your list I can’t profess to love is eating. It’s not like I hate…[Read more]

They do sound quite cute @Daeus. 😉 😀 Especially the part about the small noses. 😛

Oh wow @Daeus… Teedletiden? They sound… cute. Are they? Are they cute?
For some reason the name reminds me of C. S. Lewis’s pfifiltriggi in ‘Out of the Silent Planet’. 😛

*stares at screen, slowly turns color of guacamole* Chocolate… covered… ozone? Please… tell me you did not just say that.

And good luck with the maps @Daeus— and the fantasy itself, of course! 🙂 It takes a bit to get used to writing fantasy after having done mostly historical fiction, (it happened to me) but once you get the feel for it…[Read more]

Tectonic plates, @Daeus, to be precise. 😛 😉 And no, sorry— no steak. 😉

Yeah, I’m studying weather right now in my science @Daeus, so it’s been on the brain a lot lately. 😛 It’s perfectly fine if you’re world doesn’t even have weather patterns at all— it’s just our weather affects our world so much (Cape Horn, for instance, and that’s just one example) it seems like it would be realistic to have important weather…[Read more]

Well, let’s see if I can be a tad more constructive, though daydreaming can certainly do a lot. 😉

I would say the first thing to establish about a world is where it came from— and since we’re Christian writers, the answer to that question will probably always be ‘From the creator’. Our God figure. The next thing is to establish the people’s…[Read more]

Here I am, finally @Daeus! I’ve been drooling over this topic all morning. Permission to rant!!!!!!! It doesn’t get any better than this!!!!!!!

Oh yeah, first things first. Did I say Enlightenment? *drops head wearily in hand, rubs face with rigid fingers* I did, didn’t I? No excuse for that— an apology will have to do. 😛 I meant during the…[Read more]

Oh, and by the way @hope— nauseousness would actually be nausea… 😉

Yikes— I don’t blame him so much anymore, @hope! 😛
But you’re right— that scene is very well handled. Another good way to do it. Just go quickly— you don’t have to linger over it. Of course, if it was an interrogation it would have to be broken up with dialogue and so would take a little longer, but you can still go fairly quickly over the…[Read more]

Oh wow, I missed this topic when it was created! Thanks so much for starting it, @levipierpont! Sorry to be so late, but it’s a little more difficult to find new topics with the forum rearranged as it has been. 😉

So, world-building. This is one of my absolute worst pet peeves, so bear with me as I rant. The first thing is cultures— an amazing…[Read more]

Igh… tricky question. For me, I usually don’t have the stomach to go any further than the beginning of the scene before I cut and pick up after it’s done. I’m not setting that up as a standard— by no means! But that’s about all I as a writer can take. 😛
But I would say if you’re going to take us through the whole scene (I did that once,…[Read more]

The girl and the capsule she’s in are well done @watersnail— take it from one artist to another. And an extraordinarily picky artist at that… But you could definitely stand to work on the background and the font. Just give it more depth— I would say add color to the background behind the steam, preferably dark tones— deep brownish reds,…[Read more]

The girl and the… robot? she’s looking at are well done @watersnail— take it from one artist to another. And an extraordinarily picky artist at that… But you could definitely stand to work on the background and the font. Just give it more depth— I would say add color to the background behind the steam, preferably dark tones— deep…[Read more]

The rhythm and rhyme are absolutely beautiful— exceptional work, @hope. The only line I’m not sure about is ‘Falling from air’. It seems to have too few syllables. I would try something like ‘Abides in the air’.

And as far as I can tell, it fits very well with the story. Very well indeed. 🙂

Ick… 😛 Kinda like Trump’s ‘Loser’, eh?

I haven’t seen Megamind, but I have seen Over the Hedge, and I totally get what you’re saying @writefury. Delaying anything for too long will turn me off— development in relationships, development in situations, etc.— like if they’re just going on and on and on and literally getting NOWHERE I start to get tired. There has to be at least a…[Read more]

Does he have the same whiny, braggadocios, bullying insecurity problems @writefury? That would be something… almost a direct copy. 😛