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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Riina
“What does your dad have to do with this?” said Riina. “I don’t think humility is an inherited trait. And if it is, you must have missed out on that one. You want me to prove that you’re prideful? Fine, but you can’t get offended, since you literally asked for this.”
She held up her hand and began to count off on her fingers.
“You w…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery posted a new activity comment 10 months, 4 weeks ago
This is the technical side to present tense. Present tense adde immediacy—it feels like it’s happening *right now.* This is really good in some specific scenarios, but there’s one major problem. It is hard to maintain, it’s exhausting to read something long in present tense. Second person should almost always be present tense, and first person…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Riina
“Me?” exclaimed Riina. “I’m as humble as anyone. You, sir, are the one in need of some humility!”
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 months, 4 weeks ago
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Riina
“Mmm… not a particularly good one,” said Riina. “You could have thrown it at the nosy old guy. He would have actually deserved it.”
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic LOTR: Fellowship of the Ring in the forum Book Discussions 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Spoilers again
I have read the books, it was probably only about a year ago that I last did, but I didn’t particularly notice anything. I don’t think it’s completely sudden in the movies. There is that scene on the mountain where the ring is on the ground and he picks it up. I think that’s a little too obvious actuall…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery posted a new activity comment 10 months, 4 weeks ago
@savannah_grace2009
The thing with second person is that it implies that the reader is the main character, which means you can’t design your own character. One week in my creative writing class, we did have a 2nd person assignment, but it was a choose your own adventure story. -
Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic LOTR: Fellowship of the Ring in the forum Book Discussions 10 months, 4 weeks ago
@everyone
My family has been listening to LOTR on audiobook (the Andy Serkis version, which is really good!) and I had a thought/question that I thought I’d share.
Warning: Spoilers for the end The Fellowship of the Ring and the first chapter of The Two Towers.
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Riina
Riina cocked her head. “You’re weird,” she said, the corners of her mouth twitching slightly. “You can’t just go throwing knives at people. You need a reason to throw knives, not a reason to not throw knives! I’d say that’s a pretty basic rule of living.”
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Lost in a haunted mansion AU Roleplay in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 months, 4 weeks ago
This RP sure hasn’t gotten off well!
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Cloaked Mystery posted a new activity comment 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Yeah third person present tense is bad. I personally don’t care for present tense at all. I think of it similarly to second person narration.
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Character Party! in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Ah, that’s too bad! ☹️ My family has been taking turns being sick for the last three week, and we’re finally all healthy.
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Riina
“Reason?” repeated Riina. “There was no good reason to throw a knife at me! And I’m pretty sure I’m the one who gets to decide if we’re good!” She crossed her arms and glared (harder) at him. “My name is Riina, but you can call me ‘your Hoodedness,’ ‘cause I don’t like you.”
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Cloaked Mystery posted a new activity comment 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Typos ignore
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Cloaked Mystery posted a new activity comment 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Cause it usu Sounds weird.
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Cause it sounds weird? Was that what you were saying? After a bit, your brain shifts, and you dont even notice it. I like it with first person, as long as it isn’t just for no reason.
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@jonas I personally LOVE doing first person present tense, but not third person present. Because I switch both tenses and person, I often have no problem with my brain gears.
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Yeah third person present tense is bad. I personally don’t care for present tense at all. I think of it similarly to second person narration.
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@jonas @rae
I’m just gonna jump in on this conversation lol…
I also LOVE first person present tense…but I HATE…I mean HATE third person present…unless of course I’m writing a certain depressing short story about my life a couple months ago heh…heh….OH! I cannot STAND second person…*retches over the side of the bed* Like WHO in their…[Read more] -
@savannah_grace2009
The thing with second person is that it implies that the reader is the main character, which means you can’t design your own character. One week in my creative writing class, we did have a 2nd person assignment, but it was a choose your own adventure story. -
@jonas
I know! That’s the sad part…no fun characters ):
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Riina
“Well you kind of owe me an apology,” snapped Riina. “For the whole knife throwing thing. But at this point, I don’t think I’m going to get one out of your ugly mouth!”
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Riina
This was not going how it was supposed to at all! Riina changed tactics.
“Hmm…” she said. “So your looks must be a reflection of your soul. That explains a lot.”
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Me too.
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Cloaked Mystery posted a new activity comment 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Just…don’t do present tense.
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Cause it usu Sounds weird.
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Typos ignore
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Cause it sounds weird? Was that what you were saying? After a bit, your brain shifts, and you dont even notice it. I like it with first person, as long as it isn’t just for no reason.
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@jonas I personally LOVE doing first person present tense, but not third person present. Because I switch both tenses and person, I often have no problem with my brain gears.
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Yeah third person present tense is bad. I personally don’t care for present tense at all. I think of it similarly to second person narration.
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@jonas @rae
I’m just gonna jump in on this conversation lol…
I also LOVE first person present tense…but I HATE…I mean HATE third person present…unless of course I’m writing a certain depressing short story about my life a couple months ago heh…heh….OH! I cannot STAND second person…*retches over the side of the bed* Like WHO in their…[Read more] -
@savannah_grace2009
The thing with second person is that it implies that the reader is the main character, which means you can’t design your own character. One week in my creative writing class, we did have a 2nd person assignment, but it was a choose your own adventure story. -
@jonas
I know! That’s the sad part…no fun characters ):
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 months, 4 weeks ago
Riina
Ha! That was the worst thing he could have said. Riina pasted a horrified expression on her face and gasped.
“You mean you feel no guilt at all for throwing a knife at an innocent girl? What happened to your conscience? Have you murdered it?”
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@freedomwriter76 I’m not saying it’s bad to read, but when it comes to writing…I like the big picture. Besides, I write from the POV of Ru Eis most the time, and since she researches the events, they can’t really work well for Present Tense. It’d be like Laura Hillenbrand doing present tense for Unbroken.