Janellebelovedpig

@linus-smallprint

Yay!!! He’s back!!

That would definitely work better, giving Julian some time to come to terms with his grief.

Perfect. I made the switch this morning actually.

Why is the first thing that comes to mind the scene from The Voyage of the Dawn Treader movie?

ya know…. that works. I think I had a scene from my own mind in my…[Read more]

@liberty

*grin* Yup. That never works for an excuse!

Yup. lololol.

Actually, that scene with Leon was inspired by a true account I read! Wonder if it’s the same one?

@koshka

ball’s in your court ma’am. i have no idea where we’re going.

Rory

Rory walked beside Leo, trying to force the limp from his steps. His mind was slowly working over what Leo had said, and he risked a glance at the older boy. “Leo… what’s knighted?”

@elishavet-pidyon

Haha!!! I love that meme so much!

@koshka

Ooops! 😂

Wow, I have no idea what was even going on. I think Leo and Rory were having “brother time” 😄

Rory

Rory looked up quickly. “I’ll come with you right now!” He scrambled up. “That is, I’ll come with you now… if you would like me to… if your orders are to do so… sir… Leo.”

He shifted from one foot to the…[Read more]

@theducktator

Whattttt

That’s crazyyyy!

@hybridlore  @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty

NEXT SECTION!!

The first thing he knew was the pain. He couldn’t remember having ever been in such terrible pain. Then he felt that he was lying on something softer than the ground, and someone was bathing his back with cool water.

“Will he be alright?” a…

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@elishavet-pidyon

Show this to Viktor please.

@whalekeeper

Waaaiiit… I think I know which vending machine this is. XD

I love that. 😂

@hybridlore

Yeah, I had considered it…. but they wouldn’t work together.

@keilah-h

well good.

@keilah-h    @hybridlore

Exactly. She is not a love interest.

Also, another reason her and julian interacting  a lot wouldn’t be a good idea is because she has not had good involvment with men so she is really, really raw in that area and needs extra space.

@hybridlore

No problem. I guessed I’d get your attention with the second scene rather then the first. 😂

Well, I mentioned that Julian didn’t ever go down there, so his reputation got around through gossip rather then his own words.

She will become a part of the church, but she and Julian will not really have any scenes together. 1, it’s not…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Yep that’s true.

YES!! Thank you! It is!

@hybridlore

If you can pause a moment in your sorrow over Leon, what did you think of the scene with Julian and Rosalind?

@hybridlore

Yeah. A friend told me to split it or else he’ll wait to read it when he’s in solitary confinement. 😂

@keilah-h

Yeah! I’m glad you mentioned Julian. Most of the focus seems to be on Leon. I wonder why………… 🤔🤣

Do you think I’m really gonna tell you that?

one thing I’ll suggest, is that I feel like you don’t really introduce the family to us in the first few chapters. At first I wasn’t even sure if Blake was their sibling or not XDXD

They do have a HUGE family, so setting a solid foundation and making all the siblings and the parents unique and established in our minds would be a big thing you…[Read more]

@esther-c

Sorry it took me so long to get to this!!!
I like it a lot!!!! <3 keep it up!!!!

@ellette-giselle