Janellebelovedpig

@starshiness @esther-c

OK thanks! I have 2 other characters who are her brothers and there names are “Samuel Smith and Scott Smith” I haven’t picked out there middle names yet. Do you think that would make it sound unrealistic?

@princesachronicle22 @smiley @freedomwriter76 @keilah-h

Riya

Riya quickly looked away when one of the boys glanced up and noticed the two girls awkwardly searching for somewhere to sit.

“Hey, there’s a few seats over here!!!” He shouted, motioning towards the empty chairs. Riya sucked in an uneasy breath, hesitating to accept the boy’s offer.<…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Awwwww November!!! 😭 Poor boi.

Great scene Godly!

@godlyfantasy12

Oh, I love that scene!!! It’s so good! I just love November XD

The Silvening thing is really cool, too! 🙂

@keilah-h @thearcaneaxiom @landric @gwyndalf-the-wise

Alrighty, here’s Chapter 6! I’m not completely sure about this one… It feels right, and gets a lot of world/character building in I guess, but I’ve been told the stakes just aren’t completely there. So we’ll see XD

Chapter 6

Back on the ship, I introduce Arew to Sorren. He seems…[Read more]

@starshiness

Hmmmmmm…. good question. A princess prbly wouldn’t have anything to do with looks, but the elf thing could be because her ears were hidden… Or maybe she could be like a shapeshifter, like how certain people could change into wolves or something… I don’t know XD

@acancello Hmmm I would think that people say not to use it because perhaps if you have multiple characters with alliterated names, it would give the story a very fairytale-ish or imaginary world kind of feel and would be “unrealistic” if you know what I mean.

I agree with Esther tho, I think one name is fine and I like the sound of Sarah Shauna…[Read more]

The only thing I really didn’t do much with was the different tenses heh… the first half seemed to follow present tense but then we apparently switched to past after that? Oh well 😅

Continuing…

“Um, not intentionally… he sorta followed me here.” Piper shot Griffin a peeved look that indicated she hadn’t forgotten the offense.

 

The…

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@acancello Oh great, np!

@acancello

Great question!!

But the answer solely depends on you and what you want for your story. I feel like the name Shauna Sarah Smith would stick in my mind if I read your story. It’s easy to remember, and it may be something that defines your character. If you decide to keep it, make sure you don’t use alliteration for any other cha…[Read more]

@starshiness

Thanks for doing that 🙂 Now it looks a lot better!

@godlyfantasy12 @freedomwriter76 @whalekeeper

Fynn

Fynn rubbed the back of his neck. “Ok, ok. I’m sorry.” He looked away and rolled his eyes, making sure the fiery little kid didn’t see.

Both Lukas and the boy glared at him, not satisfied with the apology. Fynn sighed. He crouched down near the white haired boy who was clinging to Lukas,…[Read more]

@acancello Yay I’m glad you liked them!! Oo well if you ever get those ideas written down, be sure to show us the results! 🙂

@y’all Oop I saw a piece missing and some grammatical errors and they were bugging me so I just fixed them and did a teeny bit of editing. I didn’t change anyone’s wording tho, so hopefully that’s ok with everyone lol

One bright sunny day, I watched a girl leap over a rotten log and land with a splash in a muddy puddle. She was beautiful,…

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@acancello

Im soo glad you enjoyed them. I’m less than active myself. To be honest I’m basically absent unless someone tags me, mentions poetry, or a favourite book/author.

@kyronthearcanin @janellebelovedpig @godlyfantasy12 @starshiness @mineralizedwritings

Oooooh! This story is getting really good! I dont know how to add on though…. Does anyone else? Here it is so far!

One bright sunny day, I watched a girl leap over a rotten log and land with a splash in a muddy puddle. She was beautiful,daring and braver tha…[Read more]

@janellebelovedpig @starshiness @elanor @felicity

Wow! I have read all your poems and I love them so much! I am sorry I haven’t been on so long, but now i can be on more often! I haven’t written any poetry lately, but I have had a few ideas!