Janellebelovedpig

@esther-c @acancello @trailblazer @grcr @rae @mineralizedwritings

Ottoline

“Ottoline! Where are you?” Hugo’s voice echoed down the stairwell. His voice contained some sort of urgency. “Ottoline!” She heard his footsteps coming down the stairs. “There you are,” he sighed when he saw her and smiled his crooked smile that never failed to make…[Read more]

@trailblazer

“I don’t want to lose you.” I was surprised to see tears welling in Etta’s eyes.

Aww, I love their friendship! This almost made me cry XD

I agree with Hybridlore, I don’t think the summary-type writing is a bad thing. It fits great with this story!

@esther-c @trailblazer

Yeah, it does end abruptly. I really don’t like this chapter, lol. I guess….more EDITING! SO MUCH FUN!!!! (not.)

@hybridlore

Maybe something like that? I mean, Lilitu already described what happened, sort of, and I feel like it gets a little graphic in the actual flashback part. But it’s really up to you, if you feel l…

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@hybridlore

I can’t really think of anything right now, but I’ll definitely think it over and get back to you on it!

@rae

Sounds good!! I love your style, btw. It’s fresh and unique. 😊

@savannah_grace2009

I don’t think it’s too clunky. There may be a few places where it could be made a little smoother, but I’m not sure how to fix that. 😅 If this is just your first or second draft, then I think it’s definitely fine how it is. 🙂

@rae @hybridlore @mineralizedwritings @esther-c

I’ve been working on this chapter this morning…and it feels a little clunky to me. Do you guys have any input that you think would make it run smoother?

Chapter 14

The air was pleasantly cold, nipping the tip of Sef’s nose as she walked in step with Lilitu. The sound of leaves crunching b…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Do you have any moodboards?

@janellebelovedpig

Never mind I just checked and I wrote 586 words…NOT a thousand… (same thing, right? XD)

@janellebelovedpig

That’s great that you finished it!

I wrote about a thousand words during mine.

@janellebelovedpig

Hey!

I’ll join, starting at :10, ending at :40 with you.

I have a hard time with getting distracted, but I’ll try my best to stay on task, lol!

@thearcaneaxiom

yeah, if you don’t get to it that’s totally fine!

@rae

“All right, all right already. I’ve got a headache and I’m seeing kinda double and I feel weird in that I’m concerned on winning a war and you’re concerned about what I should be concerned about.”

“Well this is worrying.” …

Haha that’s funny

@rae

Thanks so much, girl! (Lately I’ve been second guessing myself, lol)

If you want to read the whole thing, here’s the link:

https://editor.reedsy.com/s/p8SdhuQ

(Of course you don’t have to if you don’t want to, haha)

@grcr

This one is my favorite of the two you posted! I love it!

@esther-c

Okay, sounds cool!

Ok, Marcurious sounds like a really cool character. 😁

I love him <3 he’s one of my favorites

@savannah_grace2009 (Ok, awesome!) @grcr @rae @trailblazer @mineralizedwritings @freedomwriter76 @acancello

Hedieh

As Hedieh twirled around the room with Amir, she couldn’t help but smile. This was so much fun. As the music slowly stopped, Hedieh sighed and let her hands fall to her sides. “You caught on pretty quickly.”

“That doesn’t mean it w…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Oh and you asked for the plot 🤦🏻‍♀️ Oops. XD Here’s the blurb for the trilogy:

They’ve been trapped inside The Orb for twenty years. It covered all of Aletheia. But it slowly closes in on the nation. The people stuck inside have no way to communicate to those outside. Families are separated. But the people have gotten used to…

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@mineralizedwritings

GIRL!!! Bucky and Steve are SO good!

I wanna make Steve my pfp now too 😂

@savannah_grace2009

Thanks so much!!

Yeah, for sure! I do have the first draft of the first book posted somewhere on here, but it’s changed a lot since then. I’m actually planning to post the third draft as I edit it soon.