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NEXT SECTION!!!

The next morning, both young men were extremely tired. They ate a light breakfast, but neither of them felt like getting up and walking again. Leon decided to lay down and doze for another hour or so, and Julian pulled out the book from J…

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@loopylin

I haven’t even read those and I already think that’s a perfect comparison!

@whalekeeper

@liberty

OH. MY. WORD.

I die every time I hear that part!!!! OH MY GOODNESS!!! Poor Jarold!

@liberty

oh good. lololol.

The way that he says dunderheaded in the Scottish accent in the drama! Priceless!!!

@hybridlore

He did, in his way. And he’ll address it again soon enough.

@liberty

WHAT!?!? You don’t like that one? (or are you choking with laughter?)

@koshka

Rory

Rory blinked slowly and looked around him. Where was he? what had happened? For a moment a shock of terror tore through him. Had they caught him:? was this…. His eyes found Leo’s and slowly the events of last night slid back into place. His shoulders relaxed and he looked down. “Sorry.”He glanced at Leo from the corner of his…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

*cries of joy* yes we needed that XD

@hybridlore @keilah-h @theshadow

I came home from school today and the van was in the driveway! The police found it in a mall parking lot. The thief still has my dad’s murse, but we have our car back, so that’s great!

Thank you so much for your prayers 🙂

@theshadow

Yeppp!!!

@elishavet-pidyon

I liked how you had Neveah try to combat the lie, and it’s obvious it’s for Sef’s sake, not her own. To make this sequence really work, maybe make Sef think her Mani is just trying to save herself – it’s not a lie about Sef, but it would make the former lie hit home. Make her really crumble since the last thing keeping the lie f…

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@elishavet-pidyon

wowww…that’s a lot to think about and really helpful!!! Thank you!

@elishavet-pidyon

Lol. Leon is more experienced than Julian. J will level out, he’s just excited and nervous and high strung and…. you get the point.

@linus-smallprint

AWWW!!! Adorable!!! So sweet!

@elishavet-pidyon

WHY would ANYONE in his right mind Say That?

It’s Julian who needs this speech. Go ask him.

He’s a little hot headed, he’s a firebrand, and he’s desperately excited to share the truth with his people.

 

Anyway, you probably do all that in this book, and I am really enjoying reading this. So far cultures are fascinating and the…

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@linus-smallprint

I like Rasins. Good for Leon and Julian not rejecting them.

why would anyone reject raisins!!??

Hmm. They’ve been away for about ten years, so things are going to feel very different to them. I can try to add a coming home feel.

Yes, they’ve had a wild day, and it’s just getting started.

Interesting. Both the…[Read more]

Here’s a little background on that scene…

yes, I know it is very sloppy and not perfect (I just wrote it literally today)

but here’s the cliffnotes:

• Sef is a slave of Iver, who is a Pythonos.
• Sef and Iver are currently in the throne room of the Master, leader of all Pythonos
• Iver has applied for a military position, and the Master is…

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@the_lost-journal

WHATTT
the chosen makes me wanna cry

it’s so good!!!! they portrayed it so well in my opinion hahaha

it’s my FAVORITE show of all time hahaha

@elishavet-pidyon

YES those are what I’m looking for!!!!
I will definitely be using those later in my book…

But I’m struggling with a specific scene where I need a lie XDXD and none of these seem to fit…

“Well, what are you waiting for?” the Master spat, motioning for Iver to continue. “You may begin whenever you are ready.”

Sef’s knees sho…

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@linus-smallprint

Okay good lol

Also, Paynes cannot become Pythonos because of genetics, but I’m not sure how to incorporate that in the book quite yet…don’t worry though, I’ll make that clearer in other drafts.

@esther-c

Okay perfect! Thank you!

@the_lost-journal

Aw I’m glad <3

Some of those were lies. what do you mean? You yourself said that they were lies.

yes, they are lies…

But they’re not the type of lies in my story…

agh I don’t know how to explain it, I’m sorry!!