Janellebelovedpig

@rae

Nice!!! I like it! Very good scene! You had me pretty tensed up! XD

Yes, this really was a good scene.

I bet he’s gonna die in the end.

One small problem I had….. the father is encouraging Baron and Jenna’s relationship, but Baron is not a Believer, and God commands that we no be unequally yoked. I would think that if her father was…[Read more]

@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty

HELLO EVERYONE!!!! I’M BACK!!!!!!!!

I survived– barely, and am well and alive– sort of.

(Came down with a nasty cold the minute I got home. Ugh.)

Anyhow, it’s so good to be back!! I have the next section, and I may post another today as well. I hav…[Read more]

@loopylin

… May I ask what’s in Alpha’s pockets?

Ha! Took me a second to figure out where this is going……. I’ll be surprised if they’re both still alive and out of jail by the end of the day.

@theducktator

*gasp* It’s a date!

Yes!! 🤭 In my first draft I actually never wrote a scene of their first study sesh together…do you think I should add that in for the second draft??

When what, Tyler? 👀 I want to know…

I would like to know as well… 🤣

Definitely left that open for the imagination or a future short story &#x1f44…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Ok, so I told you I’d finish reading your book by the end of February, and I did! But I only started like two days ago. 🤣 Here are my thoughts! (Excuse any typos, I was doing this in the car, lol!)

Ok, so the biggest thing I noticed was the lack of hope throughout the story. The characters seemed to think about death a lot…[Read more]

@hybridlore

OH MY WORD I’M GONNA BE ABLE TO ATTEND THIS ONE–

YAYAYAYAY 11 AM EST

*does a happy dance*

@hybridlore

Oh, dear. Not motivation to keep writing! *whines*

Thanks tho XD I was kind of in a rut and now I’ll have to pick up my feet and actually do something

@freed_and_redeemed

I have this forum open on my laptop. I’m gonna tag you to see if you’re able to find it again. If not, oh well. Just thought I’d give it a try! 😉

@the_lost-journal

You can also do that but do “is this a female” because that seems to be popular theme XD

(where this super cool person is wearing a mask and then they remove their mask and its a GIRL 😮

Immediately comes to mind…….

@whalekeeper

Oh, did you have a subplot POV on the side following the rescue?

No, two of my side characters were spies and they kept reporting the enemy and allies movements back to the MC. Plus, at one point when the MC was captured two of the officers get a message and kind of act startled. They leave the room, but the reader hardly notices…[Read more]

@koshka

uh yeah! Poor kid needs it!
(I gotta work a Leo into his actual book.)

he’s gotta enough hands! Pfft!

Rory

Rory smiled slightly. Sometimes Leo’s words completely flummox him, but Rory had learned to read tone and body language over words long ago. He wasn’t exactly sure what Leo meant, but he understood the tone.
“so… what do you ne…[Read more]

@koshka

Rory shrugged. “I don’t know what siblings are supposed to look like. I don’t even know if I have any of my own.” He shrugged again and picked out a few more screws. “Quincey is a fortunate boy,” he said, softly.

@koshka

Rory

Most People would have been taken aback. But not Rory. Leo’s story sounded pretty normal. In fact, better than what he’d always known.
but one thing snapped our attention him like the crack of a whip. “Wait a moment… Quincey isn’t related to you? I thought you said he was your brother!”

@freed_and_redeemed

I like the changes!! I’d just caution you to have more new conflicts than old. It’s easy to fall into the old loop. Instead think of challenges they will face as they try to build a friendship, rather than a loop of old struggles.

Just a little heads up! (I’ve had to learn the hard way and I hoped to pass on some of that…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

haha, well, I am a lover of well done death scenes. Especially if the characters and author is a Believer, otherwise it’s a little depressing.

hmmm, well, I just can’t stand cheesy rescue/escape scenes.

uh… let’s see.
Faramir. Don’t know if you’ve read LOTR, but his rescue and recovery makes sense. Gandalf saved him, and Pippin…[Read more]

@koshka

Rory 

Rory stopped sorting the bolts and screws and looked up at Leo. “Why? What happened?” For some reason he had sensed something familiar in this young man. He pushed off the couch and slid to a sitting position on the floor next to Leo. “Ever since I first met you… you seemed to me like a soldier. What are you doing down here?” h…[Read more]

@theducktator

Don’t. Get. Me. Started.
I am the person who is furious at the end of a book when my favorite character doesn’t die!! Why? Because the author cheated to save him! The mastermind villain makes a “mistake”. The unbreakable jail cell has a weakness no one who has been trying to break out for the last hundred years has discove…[Read more]