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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 7 months ago
Okay, I am caught up now.
I see you already saw some of my comments. I like where this is going and I think Sara’s reaction to the underground church makes sense. You have good attention to detail as you write.
Out of curiosity, what draft number is this? I doubt it is the first.
Looking forward to the next chapters!
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Esther replied to the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
Thanks!!! ☺️
Thank you ladies! Sure thing!!
Wait really?? Oh I didn’t even notice! Maybe I’ll have to read the book now 😝
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Ellette Giselle posted a new activity comment 1 year, 8 months ago
Thank you so much for reaching out!! Thst means so much to me!
Eh, my leg hasnt had much chance yo heal because of all the travel. But, i did run for the forst time since the inj. Wes through a snowball at me and i couldnt res pelting him for it. 😅
Lot of stress because of the legal fight. Im just hon really ready to go home. Gotta…[Read more] -
Ruth replied to the topic The Baron Chronicles in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 8 months ago
@raxforge (you haven’t read this one yet) @ellette-giselle @whalekeeper @keilah-h @hybridlore
So, I haven’t finished this one yet, but it’s getting long so I’m gonna post it in two parts.
Also, I posted a section of this story above, and I will be making that section bold so that those who already read it can skip with ease.
With that, i…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
Up to the 6th chapter. Liking it so far. It looks like your opening is well-structured for the most part. I feel drawn in and can feel the tension. Sara finding the religion stuff interesting when others seem to think it boring or not worth their time makes her a character I want to follow.
One thing. From the opening scene, I was…[Read more]
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Esther started the topic Worth All the World in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
Hey everyone!! So my lovely beta-reader (@hybridlore ) was so awesome in giving me feedback on the first draft of an older WIP (this was the one I had asked for help with a little while back). I’m planning to start digging into the editing phase this week and hopefully have the second draft finished sometime in March (we’ll see… sometimes life…[Read more]
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TheShadow replied to the topic The Woods of Rosen in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
It’s a super irrational fear but it’s there. Not that your story is scaring me, I enjoy it.
Lol, thanks, and no judgment on the the irrational fear, we all have them XD. Whenever I’m alone and can’t find anyone in the house I assume they’ve been Thanos snapped or something lol.
Glad you like it, thanks!
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whaley replied to the topic Topic of the Week…? in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 8 months ago
😊 It would be nice to have fresh discussions every week, because sometimes people want to have fun conversations, but don’t know where to start.
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whaley started the topic Topic of the Week…? in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 8 months ago
So, Topic of the Week! Do we want to start it up again somehow? Please discuss here – if you want it to come back, or if you have any strong opinions about how it should be revitalized.
I’m hesitant to take Kathleen’s job. However, I have plenty of ideas of my own, and would be delighted to do it myself. If this becomes the game plan, I am eager…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic Flash Fiction Critique Needed!!! in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 8 months ago
@hybridlore @keilah-h @theducktator @liberty
Telling y’all this now so I won’t procrastinate this week, lol.
I’m going to edit the paragraph and then repost it by Friday, taking into account your suggestions.
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TheShadow replied to the topic The Woods of Rosen in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
Great, here it is:
Chapter 1
“You ever wondered what it would be like to leave Rosen?” Jack questioned, glancing down at his twin sister.
Elina’s eyebrows shot up, “Why? Do you want to?”
“I don’t know.” Jack replied. “I’ve been thinking about it a lot, though. I mean, it’s kind of weird we can’t leave, what with the wa…[Read more] -
Keilah H. replied to the topic Mood Boards/Aesthetics in the forum Characters 1 year, 8 months ago
@elishavet-pidyon oooh that sounds interesting! I agree with @hybridlore, you should at least write a synopsis or something.
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TheShadow replied to the topic The Woods of Rosen in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
@hybridlore @ellette-giselle @linus-smallprint @whalekeeper @the_lost-journal @keilah-h
I rewrote the first chapter with all of your suggestions in mind, do you want me to post it for your thoughts/critiques?
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whaley replied to the topic The Woods of Rosen in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
I think me and shadow are the only people on here who write anything creepy… 😂
You’re not the only ones. My Lovedream project is sci-fi fantasy mixed with horror, or something like that.
I’m following along! And I’ll answer any group questions you post; for now, I’ll stay quiet. *Ninja reads*
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The Ducktator replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
One thing I’ve noticed is that you tend to use a lot of ellipses.
“Our house is full of ducks!!!!”
Ducks???👀
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TheShadow replied to the topic The Woods of Rosen in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
i am so relieved Jack is still there!! Also, I have a feeling I’m going to like Dylan.
just a hunch.I hope you like Dylan too, he’s probably my second favorite character to write.
also, I’m not sure about Olivia and Adaline’s reaction. You see, when people bully others it tends to be because of insecurity and cowardice. I have…
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
Sorry I’m late.
Sounds interesting. Sure, I will give your book a try. I’ve sent an access request from Justin Russell (the 458th one apparently).
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TheShadow replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
Some things I’d really like to hear from y’all are scene ideas. I’m planning to go back and extend a lot of the earlier chapters (at least 1-6) because I didn’t have the same word count goal for them as I do now. So if you have any ideas for scenes that would fit into those (or future scenes) I would love to hear them. So far I have…
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TheShadow replied to the topic The Woods of Rosen in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 8 months ago
@keilah-h @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @the_lost-journal @liberty
Okay, here’s the next chapter. Any critiques/thoughts would be appreciated.
Chapter 2
It was quiet. Extraordinarily quiet. The clock did not tick on Elina’s wall, the alarm on her phone did not blare, and her siblings did not come to wake her up. The only noise came from Elina h…[Read more]
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Help me pick a colorful name for this magic system in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 8 months ago
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Of course! I miss talking with you! After asking that, I stalked the forums for a bit and saw that you had posted about being there. I’m sorry it’s been so rough! I’ll be praying that your leg continues to heal and everything gets sorted out and you can get home soon! Hopefully you and your family can be a light to your extended family members.
Thank you for the prayers. Having people reach and actually Care has been a really great encouragement. Thank you so much. I miss you too, which is funny because it’s not like I’m any farther or closer to you than normal. Feel free to email anytime. Thanks again.
Absolutely. I know, haha, it’s just we haven’t really talked lately. We’ll have to set up another Google Meet once you get back. Sure thing! 💕