hybridlore

@hybridlore

Up to the 6th chapter. Liking it so far. It looks like your opening is well-structured for the most part. I feel drawn in and can feel the tension. Sara finding the religion stuff interesting when others seem to think it boring or not worth their time makes her a character I want to follow.

One thing. From the opening scene, I was…[Read more]

@keilah-h

It’s a super irrational fear but it’s there. Not that your story is scaring me, I enjoy it.

Lol, thanks, and no judgment on the the irrational fear, we all have them XD. Whenever I’m alone and can’t find anyone in the house I assume they’ve been Thanos snapped or something lol.

@hybridlore

Glad you like it, thanks!

@hybridlore @keilah-h

😊 It would be nice to have fresh discussions every week, because sometimes people want to have fun conversations, but don’t know where to start.

@hybridlore @keilah-h @theducktator @liberty

Telling y’all this now so I won’t procrastinate this week, lol.

I’m going to edit the paragraph and then repost it by Friday, taking into account your suggestions.

@keilah-h @hybridlore

Great, here it is:

Chapter 1

“You ever wondered what it would be like to leave Rosen?” Jack questioned, glancing down at his twin sister.

Elina’s eyebrows shot up, “Why? Do you want to?”
“I don’t know.” Jack replied. “I’ve been thinking about it a lot, though. I mean, it’s kind of weird we can’t leave, what with the wa…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon oooh that sounds interesting! I agree with @hybridlore, you should at least write a synopsis or something.

@hybridlore @ellette-giselle @linus-smallprint @whalekeeper @the_lost-journal @keilah-h

I rewrote the first chapter with all of your suggestions in mind, do you want me to post it for your thoughts/critiques?

@the_lost-journal @hybridlore

I think me and shadow are the only people on here who write anything creepy… 😂

You’re not the only ones. My Lovedream project is sci-fi fantasy mixed with horror, or something like that.

@theshadow

I’m following along! And I’ll answer any group questions you post; for now, I’ll stay quiet. *Ninja reads*

@hybridlore

One thing I’ve noticed is that you tend to use a lot of ellipses.

@theshadow

“Our house is full of ducks!!!!”

Ducks???👀

@ellette-giselle

i am so relieved Jack is still there!! Also, I have a feeling I’m going to like Dylan.
just a hunch.

I hope you like Dylan too, he’s probably my second favorite character to write.

also, I’m not sure about Olivia and Adaline’s reaction. You see, when people bully others it tends to be because of insecurity and cowardice. I have…

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@hybridlore

Sorry I’m late.

Sounds interesting. Sure, I will give your book a try. I’ve sent an access request from Justin Russell (the 458th one apparently).

@hybridlore

Some things I’d really like to hear from y’all are scene ideas. I’m planning to go back and extend a lot of the earlier chapters (at least 1-6) because I didn’t have the same word count goal for them as I do now. So if you have any ideas for scenes that would fit into those (or future scenes) I would love to hear them. So far I have…

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@keilah-h @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @the_lost-journal @liberty

Okay, here’s the next chapter. Any critiques/thoughts would be appreciated.

Chapter 2

It was quiet. Extraordinarily quiet. The clock did not tick on Elina’s wall, the alarm on her phone did not blare, and her siblings did not come to wake her up. The only noise came from Elina h…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Thanks!

No, this one spawned an entirely new setting. I just can’t help it!

@highscribeofaetherium @hybridlore @theducktator @loopylin @grcr

Thanks for the feedback! So far, it looks like the popularity ranking is:

1. Chromancy
2. Spectrachromy
3. Prismathurgy
4. Spectrathurgy
5. Spectralurgy

With the other three having no votes. I’ll take this into consideration.

As some have guessed, this is a color-based magic system.…[Read more]

@hybridlore

no!!! I can’t access this without my laptop!! 😭😭😭😭

I’ll let you know what I think the minute I get home!!

@ellette-giselle @hybridlore @whalekeeper @keilah-h

Sorry for not posting in eight days. I hit Writer’s Block while trying to edit the next story to go on here and writing the next one 🙁

I’m not sure how long until I can post the full thing, but until then, I’m gonna post a snippet of the next…[Read more]