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TheShadow replied to the topic The Woods of Rosen in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @hybridlore @the_lost-journal
Okay, well here’s the first chapter. I’m not a huge fan of it, but the other draft first chapter wasn’t great either. So critiques are definitely appreciated.
Chapter 1
“You ever wondered what it would be like to leave Rosen?”
Elina’s eyebrows shot up, “Why? Do you intend to?”
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TheShadow replied to the topic The Woods of Rosen in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Thanks, it’ll be a little creepy, though it’s not the main focus.
Lol thank you.
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Esther replied to the topic Flash Fiction Critique Needed!!! in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 2 months ago
It looks great! This was a cool idea. I think you did a good job inserting a theme into such a tiny paragraph. Out of curiosity, how much do you have left in the word count?
Thanks!! Oh yes, that was so hard! I was going to keep it lighthearted and goofy, and then I was like, Hold on. And tried something a little different. 😛
Ummm… a…[Read more]
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Loopy replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
I don’t know who’s in charge of the others… I’m sure whalekeeper would know.
Most roleplays don’t have one person in charge usually. That’s something that’s unique to the adventure rp. We usually just agree to some basic rules and then kinda do whatever
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
So, question. Is there an RP on here that I could randomly stuff some characters into, or is now not a good time?
Well, as @hybridlore alluded to, there is the character adventure RP. You would be totally welcome to join, although the it has been pretty much inactive recently. (Also, in case it would affect you, we do have a c…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
@hybridlore @ellette-giselle @raxforge @esther-c @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @theshadow @keilah-h
The others:@power @calyhuge @whalekeeper @theducktator @elishavet-pidyon @the_lost-journal @trailblazer @jonas @beth-torres @euodia-vision @thearcaneaxiom @smiley @freed_and_redeemed @loopylin @felicity @savannah_grace2009 @koshka
Please pard…[Read more]
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Esther started the topic Flash Fiction Critique Needed!!! in the forum Short Story Critiques 1 year, 2 months ago
Hey guys! So I’m entering a little contest that one of my favorite magazines is doing. Basically they wanted me to finish the letter (they gave me like the first two lines) in under 250 words and they’d publish a few of the submissions they’ll receive in the next issue.
I need y’all to tear into this piece! Give me whatever feedback comes to mind…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Thank you!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
Okay, little UPDATE y’all.
We had a death in the family. (don’t worry, not someone I even met before. He was on my dad’s side of the family and they’re all messed up.) Anyhow, due to craziness and the fact that my dad is the only sane person on that sid…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
😂😂😂
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
wow. It’s like -30 right now over here.
Huh. Never heard anyone describe him like that. 😅 We’ll have to see!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Okay, well I’ll see if anyone else says something.
wait…. it’s 70 degrees where you are?!?!
IT’S FREEZING over here.
oh, btw, what do you think of the newest character, Roland?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
btw, your pfp is making me cold. XD
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
I don’t know why…. but I’m not seeing another option, and it makes consistent sense with the rest of scripture.
If it feels like a controversial topic, I have several of those and this is not one I feel like I need to die on, so I can pull it.
What do you think?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Okay, so I did sight the Hebrew’s verse about death and sins, and then of course there are all the verses about sacrifice. But here’s the sinch.
The operative word in Gen 3:21 is עוֹר which occurs almost 100 times in the Old Testament Hebrew. It is used in only two senses:
skin of a human, eg, Ex 22:26, 34:39, etc
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Ugh. Let me look. I’m horrid at references. Romans….. i think. Maybe Hebrews. Just a sec.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
No problem!!
Okay great! I’m glad the journal thing payed off.
Leon was a gladiator?? 😅
Of sorts.
Don’t worry, Julian is having all the same questions as you most likely are.
Um, when was this?
God required animal sacrifices to provide a temporary covering of sins and to foreshadow the perfect and complete sacrifice of Jesus…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
NEXT SECTION!!!
Okay…. so here is where I hit a slight problem. Leon and Julian use a very different script which is how you tell their writing apart. However, those fonts don’t transfer. So, I’ll italicize anything Julian writes, and have anything Le…[Read more]
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TheShadow started the topic The Woods of Rosen in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Hello, how are you all? Nice Thursday isn’t it (well, the weathers not great here but that’s okay).
Here, I will be posting chapters for my new WIP, The Woods of Rosen. ill probably post the first chapter tomorrow once it has been thoroughly cleaned up, and please feel free to critique anything from it. If you don’t like something in it, somet…[Read more]
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TheShadow replied to the topic Character Name Help in the forum Characters 1 year, 2 months ago
Thank you!! I might go with Emmerich, it sounds nice.
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