hybridlore

Okay, after reading this through again, I don’t think I’m the best person to give you critiques on this book.

You see, I’m really experienced in fantasy and sci fi (and half the time I don’t even know what I’m doing XD)

And a book like yours isn’t something that I’d probably pick up on my own.

In no way is this because of the book itself…it’s…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

ack! i messed up your tag. two messages above for you!

@savannah_grace2009

Ummmm I was the one who keeps getting your story COMPLETELY WRONG!!! Sorry again…….I feel soooo bad 😔😔

Don’t feel bad! It means I have a few things to make clearer. I won’t be around to correct every reader. lol.

(AND Aaron acts older than Turin XD)

Aaron is more mature then Turin.

I think I’d just like to see more of Aaron…

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Ummmm I was the one who keeps getting your story COMPLETELY WRONG!!! Sorry again…….I feel soooo bad 😔😔

Don’t feel bad! It means I have a few things to make clearer. I won’t be around to correct every reader. lol.

(AND Aaron acts older than Turin XD)

Aaron is more mature then Turin.

I think I’d just like to see more of Aaron’s flaws whether…

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@ellette-giselle

He was frustrated as anyone would be in the circumstances…… Turin is the one with the wicked temper around here. You can be someone who is naturally very easy going, but who does lose their temper in a certain situation, or at least gets frustrated

Ohhh okay 👍

I think I’d just like to see more of Aaron’s  flaws whether or not…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @anyone_else_whos_intereste

                Against All Odds Playlist!!

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2.) Jack: h ttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bwvRaHmn694

3.) Villain: h ttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IskFoAob2wY&list=PL61EA7836AA4687F1&index=6

4.) Main ship: There is none.…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @linus-smallprint

Ok, here’s the next part….. and then things get bad. lol.

Morning dawned, and after breakfast and a time of prayer, the men and boys went off to train with the soldiers.

Turin was a born fighter, and the way of the sword seemed natural and easy to him. Aaron, on the other hand, found sword craft less to…

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Okay, but you clearly said he did have a temper earlier, and @shadow said she liked it.

He was frustrated as anyone would be in the circumstances…… Turin is the one with the wicked temper around here. You can be someone who is naturally very easy going, but who does lose their temper in a certain situation, or at least gets f…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Okay…I’m so sorry…I’m not the best at critiqueing 😣😭😭😭😭Actually I’m horrible at it but oh well

OK, in the begining I said that Aaron was 18!! Turin was a year or two older Sabina was 16! Does that fix it???

Well…you should be able to tell a character’s age based on how they act, without the author saying that. Since both…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @linus-smallprint

ok crazies…. here is TURIN who is a TEENAGER and DOESN’T have a beard.

ok crazies…. here is TURIN who is a TEENAGER and DOESN’T have a beard.

@lightoverdarkness6

Howdy Light! I can’t remember if we’ve met, but welcome back!!

I’m excited to see some of your stuff, so tag me if you post anything!

Oh my goodness YOU GUYS!!!

OK, in the begining I said that Aaron was 18!! Turin was a year or two older Sabina was 16! Does that fix it???

I would suggest setting this story on Earth. You can still keep the country names, it can just be an alternate reality of Earth where there used to be countries with those names. Your world and ours are…

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We should resurrect this thing.

@anyone

So, I was going through my school stuff from last year, and found this in my brain book. Math is boring, okay?

I glared at the problem in front of me, wondering when the agony would end, wanting to scream, but knowing that it would only bring more pain. The clock read 11:53, only seven minutes to go. Seven minutes, but it felt like…[Read more]

@everyone

I promise I didn’t ghost this topic. I’ve just been too tired and brain dead for worldbuilding. (It’s my fault. I was up past two reading again.) I’ll probably respond tomorrow or the day after. 🙂

Here’s Sef’s playlist

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@lightoverdarkness6

Aww tysm!! Hahaha yes, slowly getting there😴

Oh my goodness I’m so sorry girl 🥺 That sounds so scary!! I’m always here if you ever need anything. My grandparents yesterday were actually just talking about when my uncle had Lyme disease when he was a teenager and the doctors gave him an antibiotic that cured him.

Thank you, yea…[Read more]

Guys…

I just made a playlist for Lilitu…

Apparently Lilitu loves rock songs…

WHAT HAVE I DONE?!?!

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