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@whalekeeper

Thanks for the thoughts! I’ll definitely try to work that in.

@linus-smallprint  @linus-smallprint

AHHH!!! I forgot to tag people on this new section! I was wondering why no one said anything!!! I’ll just re-post this whole thing.

Ok, here is the next (REALLY LONG!) section! Enjoy!!! I am hoping for LOT’S of fe…[Read more]

@theshadow oh man you’re actually reading it

glad you like it so far though

I’ll make sure to update it later, I don’t write directly on the google doc, I have it in Word and then copy it over

@ellette-giselle

yes!! Fire away!! I’m ready for it now! I think I’m prepared for people to criticize Aaron.

Okay!! So this isn’t a critique of Aaron himself, like ‘ohyouhavetochangehim.’ It’s for you to improve his arc.

Aaron begins to verbally doubt God during the siege. But his very first act was trusting God to lead him into a dangerous kin…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Oh no! I’ll be praying for you. Is there any specific way I can be doing that?

I’m doing okay lol, thanks for the offer! I caught the dreaded senioritis in my junior year and I just don’t want to return to school. I’ve had symptoms of depression since a year ago and… Blegh… I don’t know what to do about it.

On the bright s…[Read more]

@rae

I would encourage you to play around with it and see what you like. This is a first or second draft, so I wouldn’t worry too much about the POVs being in the right place.

But yeah, I really like what Calyhuge suggested. Sometimes you just have to write and figure it out as well. Definitely write from both POVs in this part of the draft, t…[Read more]

@loopylin

@I’mtooselfconsioustoactullytagpeople

but what about meeeeee

XD I love seeing your art! Also, those sketches are super cute.

And you’re so good at drawing toes. They are the bane of my existence.

@ellette-giselle

AGREED!

XD

@whalekeeper

Oh no! I’ll be praying for you. Is there any specific way I can be doing that?

yes!! Fire away!! I’m ready for it now! I think I’m prepared for people to criticize Aaron.

Your writing output is still so prolific, that’s great!

Aw!! Thank you! That’s so encouraging!

You killed the king and that made me 100% sad!!! WHY?!?!?! 😭…

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Some completely positive notes <3

1. Your writing output is still so prolific, that’s great!! Most writers slow down towards the middle of a story, including myself.

2. I enjoy the king character. He seems like a straightforward, honorable guy who might be a tad prideful but still attempting to be a leader. He shouldn’t die. Nor should Sabina.…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I’m still following! Sorry, I was actually having a rough time the same week, so I took a break from KP. 😅 I will probably continue to spend time away from here due to senior projects.

So, I do have more Aaron notes since you started exploring his trust issues. They are on the constructive side of things. I want to make sure you…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

yes!! I would love more feedback! I’m so sorry if I made it seem like I didn’t!

I was having a rough day when the whole Aaron critique thing happened. 😅

please, go right ahead!! I would love your thoughts! Sorry I haven’t been tagging you! I thought you were no longer interested in this!

I’ve always struggled with drawing a cartoon version of myself but now I have to XD

@loopylin

You and the stuffy are so cuuuuuuute!! Ack!! ❤️🥺 I picture you similarly to this. The pastels are so you. 

@grcr

Yeah maybe… to give everyone time to respond to Keilah

That’s just what I was thinking.

I might join this despite my art requests page XD

Ok, here is the next (REALLY LONG!) section! Enjoy!!! I am hoping for LOT’S of feedback on this because I do some intense stuff! lol.

The first thing Aaron was aware of were shouts and the clash of steel. Sword fighting? But…

Aaron raised his aching head. He sat up and wiped blood from his face, and then reached for the wall and shakily p…

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Heeyy, I have more feedback whenever you want it 😛

@ellette-giselle

Aw thanks! 😊

Yeah maybe… to give everyone time to respond to Keilah… idk, it’s up to you… tomorrow’s probably good though!