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@ellette-giselle

Wait, you wrote the hymns? I thought you had just pasted them in. 😳

(There’s a lot of hymns I’m not familiar with, since we don’t normally sing them at my church.)

@ellette-giselle

I finished! (And the art for the cover is really cool.) I gave answering those questions a shot, even though you might be past the point of feedback, I figured you might want to hear what I thought.

Were the characters believable?

For the most part, yes. At times, there was somewhat stilted (slightly forced seeming, or maybe a…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

You can’t leave me hanging there!! 😖 Although, I’m wondering if I want to know what happens next.

No real changes to the scene that I could think of. The one hymn is pretty long, but if you want to include it all, that’s fine.

I didn’t really notice that the uncle’s betrayal felt forced, but I would have to go back and look at it again to see for sure. I was so preoccupied with Yeah, I knew that was gonna happen and Oh no—what’s gonna happen to them now? To really focus on it. Unless Linus feels otherwise, I think it was fine.

@ellette-giselle

Sorry this took me so long to respond—I didn’t get a notification, so I thought you hadn’t wrote back yet.

My first thought is that you would need to save Joseph, because it would be strange to kill off the main character three quarters (four fifths?) of the way through the book.

But looking past that, Joseph’s charact…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Eh, I wasn’t surprised.

@ellette-giselle

Joseph, Amelia, and Beric. I don’t know her brothers well enough yet.

I’ve let myself be deceived. My whole life I thought I’d never have the strength, and I was right. But it’s not about me at all! None of this is.” Joseph waved his hand to punctuate his words. “My whole life I’ve been worried about what I can and can’t do, but…

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Good scenes, though. Joseph was a tiny bit preachy when he had his character shift arc, but it worked since that’s been his struggle since the beginning.

I can’t wait to see what happens next. 🥺

@ellette-giselle

Ellette!!!!! 🥺🥺

What are you going to do to them??

Though we haven’t had any new people for a while… I wonder if Kathleen has stopped like checking people in. 🤷‍♀️ It used to be, like, every weekend or two we’d get a handful of new folks.

@keilah-h

Weird. I can’t even remember how they let me know I joined… probably an email. It’s worth checking.

@whalekeeper

I have mental health stuff, but I wouldn’t attribute all of it to oldest kid responsibilities. For me it’s a factor among other factors, not the cause.

Same. I think my OCD actually contributes a lot to me being bossier as an oldest child, because I like to have things a certain way.

@theducktator

Same. That, (and my obsession wit…

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@liberty

Oh, I love that verse!

@keilah-h

Yeah. We used to write together but never really got too far into anything. She still loves to read but I don’t think she’s written in a while. My brother hasn’t really shown any interest in writing, either, so I guess it’s just me.

@whalekeeper

Lol. I remember Lydibug, though… she was around on the RPs for a while. My sister de…[Read more]

@smiley

I’m doing pretty well! My family is getting ready for the next school semester, and planning for a possible move around May.

yeah *face palms* in the end I have to remind myself that no one thinks about me as much as me lol

what a comfort lol

I know exactly what you mean 😅

Well, whenever you want to share, I’d love to hear about it! I a…[Read more]

@theshadow

That’s cool. My sister (@snickerdoodle) used to be on here, for about all of ten minutes. She doesn’t write anymore though.

@freed_and_redeemed

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