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@ellette-giselle

Yay, Leon and Julian are back! 😁 Great section. It did kind of gloss everything and not show it personally, but that’s okay as long as your go back to more immediate-feeling scenes, if that makes sense. Joseph’s character is good. I’m glad he feels afraid and guilty for his fear. He feels human.

@ellette-giselle

You can borrow them back to post as long as you don’t kill them.

@ellette-giselle

HEY. There’s not enough room, okay? I like that quote.

Is that really a thing? Anyway, it’s too late. They’re mine now.

@ellette-giselle

Nope. Not happening. *puts all of your characters on the protection squad*

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, the special attention, and her age. 🤪

@ellette-giselle

Ohhhh, gotcha.

I don’t know. The way you described her. I think I’m just used to picking out love interests immediately.

@ellette-giselle

Lolol. How did Linus know about Amelia already? And you weren’t very subtle. XD

True, but they would have gotten married.

@ellette-giselle

I feel like Joseph and Amelia are going to get married . . . 🤭

@ellette-giselle

That’s true, the rewrite was.

The one paragraph where you said something along the lines of, make the enemy rejoice when you’re out of the fight, seemed taken straight from that quote (C.S. Lewis?) I could see modern believers saying something like that, but I don’t think it would be a well-known phrase in this world. Maybe p…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Yay!!! A happy part this time!! 🥲

@esther-c

Praying! 🙏😢

@ellette-giselle

I have not. Thanks for reminding me about it, lol.

@ellette-giselle

Nope! You just told me I could only put a few of them in my signature, plus the 100 character limit, and that was when I was trying to convince you to save Eric. I can try to fit them all in, or I’ll just write “all of Ellette’s charries” if that’s what you prefer. 🤗😉

@ellette-giselle Looks good!

@ellette-giselle

Hey, he can’t hear me. 🤭

Okay, cool. Looking forward to the next section!

@ellette-giselle

Gotcha. Yeah, no problem. He did faint, so there obviously was enough blood lost for that. You’re good! So, does this mean you’ll have to rewrite a lot of what you already have, or not much since you’re about to have Joseph leave?

@ellette-giselle

Overall, it was pretty good. Some of the dialogue towards the end felt a tiny bit clunky, though.

Very well,”” Eric sighed. “I shall bare the displays of emotion for tonight, but by tomorrow hugs will be limited to once a month.”

This is funny, but it sounds old-fashioned all of a sudden. Is Eric just teasing? Does he lapse i…[Read more]

@rae @raxforge I was kind of shipping you guys in my head already, but I didn’t want to say anything in case it was completely wrong. That’s cute though. 🥲💕