Hope Ann

No, we live near Warsaw and Columbia City. 🙂

Welcome! Hey, I live on a small farm in Indiana too. *Squints suspiciously* What if I know you and you’re under a pen name here? Hmm…

@belegteleri Wow, there are a lot of Tania’s on there. 🙂 Could you maybe post a link so I could find you?

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It is tricky. Normally I stick with general description mixed with emotions, thoughts, and a general haze of pain. During one scene where a character is beaten, I mention the first few blows and then there is just a few lines about a haze of pain and blows on every side…well, it’s easier to just copy it (this is part of the reason Cyth isn’t…[Read more]

Daven the Black?

Or maybe something ‘the black’, or ‘the blackhearted’ (though that might be a bit overused). My brother came up with a character who’s surname was Blackheart…and the man wore a black heart on his belt. That could be interesting. 😉

Actually, I wrote an article for this site on world building. And it’s easier to just link it than repeat it… https://kingdompen.org/a-three-tiered-world/ There are a few other articles here on world building too; you can look them up in the search box.

Oh yes, I’ve created three worlds to date…or is it four? And then there is a futuristic world I’m writing a story in…

Anyhow, I agree with what Kate said. Also, there is the religious aspect to your world. Is there more than one religion? Is there a good and bad religion? How does it effect life? Laws? Peoples and nations?

Also, what of…[Read more]

Weapons in the braids! That’s cool. I don’t think it will fit in this story, but there’s a sifi Rapunzel I’m thinking about and that would be perfect for that. 😉

I swallowed hard and closed my eyes. “I can’t…I can’t go in there.”

I could feel Daren’s stare. “What’s that supposed to mean? We’re getting through this cave.”

“But…” I motioned helplessly towards the creatures covering the ground between me and the opposite exit.

“Fluffy night bunnies?” Daren’s stare turned into a smirk. “A grown knight…[Read more]

@Daeus Too funny! 😉

How about this (the numbers tell how many syllables are in each line)

4 Silenced by hate,
4 Thrall of despair
5 The melody fails
4 Death of an heir.

4 Wakened by joy,
4 Freed by the light
5 Unbound by the sword
4 Ending the night.

4 Carried by love,
4 Soaring from ward
5 Wingmasters’ melody
4 Song of the sword.

About line three of the first s…[Read more]

@Daeus Thanks.

‘fell doom of calm’ is one of the trickier lines, I just need to think of an alternative. I want it (and the next line) to carry at least a hint about the birds not singing anymore and there being silence. I just have to figure out what words to use…

@Daeus Thanks.

‘fell doom of calm’ is one of the trickier lines, I just need to think of an alternative. I want it (and the next line) to carry at least a hint about the birds not singing anymore and there being silence, but I’m not sure that I’ve done that very well.

Thanks. 😉 I decided I better get working on the story, so settled down in a corner of the sewing room (the least busy room of our small house) and stared at my computer screen until I slowly came up with something. 😉

I’m not sure about ‘abides in the air’ simply because ‘abides’ is the opposite of ‘falling’. But then again, taken together, it…[Read more]

What is the youngest age of your actors? 😉 I used to put on plays with my siblings, though that was long ago when I was around 12 and the youngest was around 6. Are you directing this play too, or just writing it?

As to advice, take what I say for whatever it is worth.

1. Try to keep the dialogue fairly short, or at least in short pieces.…[Read more]

Like @Daeus said, if you do include an character who is an ethnic minority, one should make them fresh and completely human, not following common cliches.

This is actually a topic I’ve thought some on. I am writing a trilogy and realized all my characters where white…simply because about everyone I know is white and that is naturally how I…[Read more]