hanako

@jonas

@jonas

SEE?

@jonas

*evil smile creeps over my face*

Ellis

Ellis glanced behind him. Kate and Nora were in an argument again.

He turned back to Zahlin. “If it gets out of hand. You can’t get rid of me that easily. You say you don’t bully people, but I can’t imagine you doing anything else.”

Zahlin

Zahlin crossed his arms. “I do not bully people, and if you think the way I train her is bullying, you should see how they do it in the armies back home.” He glanced over to where the two women were arguing, getting more and more hostile. “Are you going to stop your friend from murdering Nahim’s fiancée? Because now would probably be a goo…[Read more]

@jonas

DON’T SAY THE WORD!!!!!! She’s going to take that as a challenge!

@highscribeofaetherium

I think @rae ran out of dragon pictures.

Oh thank goodness! I thought when I came back we’d have twenty pages of you-know-what! XD

@rae

It doesn’t sound boring to me, although I’ve barely read any of the chapters you posted (I’ve been meaning to get around to it, but there’s a lot there.)

It might be helpful to strip the plot down to its basics. Are you familiar with freytag’s pyramid? It’s basically a chart that shows the elements of plot: exposition, rising action, cli…[Read more]

@everyone @anyone and @everybody

So, I’ve got a problem…

I’ve been writing for little over a year on my first book I didn’t quite halfway. The first draft is done, though it really shouldn’t be called a first draft, more like ‘a girl playing around with a story with no idea what plot is.’

I’m currently on my like tenth attempt at the r…[Read more]

@everyone @anyone and @everybody

So, I’ve got a problem…

I’ve been writing for little over a year on my first book I didn’t quite halfway. The first draft is done, though it really shouldn’t be called a first draft, more like ‘a girl playing around with a story with no idea what plot is.’

I’m currently on my like tenth attempt at the r…[Read more]

@beth-torres

Btw, feel free to have Carrie come in whenever you want. The rest of the characters are in the dining hall, so you could just start with her walking in if you weren’t sure how to start.

@rae

Yeah, that’s helpful. I think partially what I could use help figuring out is if he there is someone more interesting.

Kate

Kate laughed. “You think anything you’re wearing can protect against pure concentrated force? And you can call me ‘Lady Atmor,’ not ‘Young One.’”

@jonas

I’m going to take a wild chance and give you advice when I have no context…

Unless you think you can pull Grayton off in an interesting way, that makes readers want to read about him, don’t make him the MC. I doubt that helps any.

@beth-torres

lol!

@rae

you probably have more horse pictures than dragon pictures lol

Got to go, bye!