Gwyndalf the Wise

@rae

Sounds good!! I love your style, btw. It’s fresh and unique. 😊

@savannah_grace2009

I don’t think it’s too clunky. There may be a few places where it could be made a little smoother, but I’m not sure how to fix that. 😅 If this is just your first or second draft, then I think it’s definitely fine how it is. 🙂

@rae

Also what kind of things do you most want criticism on? Grammar? Style? Story structure?

I can also just read it and tell you the things I like about it. : )

@rae

Hello!

I’m sorry I didn’t see you tagging me for a while. I finally started reading your story and I’m enjoying it so far, but I’m only halfway through chapter two. I have a really hard time reading the italics and long paragraphs, but I’m not giving up! I’ll give you a longer response later when I finish it.

Thanks for tagging me. Sorry I…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Right, like the internal resolution vs the outward resolution. Sooo, I sort of feel like Katrin doesn’t exactly have her own huge goal. It’s more she’s trying to survive and protect her brother, but I’ve lately realized that she also holds a grudge against the administrators for a few reasons, mostly just because of the living conditi…

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Oh and as long as the rest  of your book is unique it’s alright to have a stereotypical ending. It’s when your book has a love triangle, America as a setting, and rebels taking down the government. If you can add one factor to really mix it up and make it something totally new, it won’t be considered stereotypical (Is it set in England for a…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Oof that’s a hard one XD

For a single novel, I think you do need a defining ending.

Something I have heard about in my research about plots is that there’s two separate goals your character has to reach. One of them is said and known about, such as defeating the government, the other is never mentioned but obvious to the reader.…[Read more]

@euodia-vision

Thank you so much!!

Lol go ahead and use it for a bit if you like! I’m not terribly attached because it was just a sketchy thing XD

@freedomwriter76

Aww it was cute!!

@whalekeeper

Thanks! 😊 I’m really behind on inktober. I think it’s probably just going to turn into inkautumn for me lol.

Ok, I’m exaggerating. It was only a few people and all they did was say the character was creepy and going to give them nightmares. I think it was a month ago maybe? I’m probably just worrying a bit too much about what pe…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium

Thanks!
Lol, yeah, I’m just really cautious on this website now because I remember a bunch of people freaking out when someone posted a picture of a chibi cartoon character from a video game a bit ago. I guess they thought she was creepy because she had pointy teeth?

@euodia-vision ok

So uh slightly creepy warning for all the sensitive people I guess?

The prompt was path.

@smiley @whalekeeper @esther-c @euodia-vision

Ooooo shopping! I totally wanna do that!

But, uh, Felicity probably wouldn’t be too interested. Someone’s gotta convince her.

And we could also have some villain conflict too while we’re waiting for Fan.

Also I’m going to add my alien characters soon if anyone wants to meet them.

@savannah_grace2009 (Ok, awesome!) @grcr @rae @trailblazer @mineralizedwritings @freedomwriter76 @acancello

Hedieh

As Hedieh twirled around the room with Amir, she couldn’t help but smile. This was so much fun. As the music slowly stopped, Hedieh sighed and let her hands fall to her sides. “You caught on pretty quickly.”

“That doesn’t mean it w…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Oh and you asked for the plot 🤦🏻‍♀️ Oops. XD Here’s the blurb for the trilogy:

They’ve been trapped inside The Orb for twenty years. It covered all of Aletheia. But it slowly closes in on the nation. The people stuck inside have no way to communicate to those outside. Families are separated. But the people have gotten used to…

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@mineralizedwritings

GIRL!!! Bucky and Steve are SO good!

I wanna make Steve my pfp now too 😂

@savannah_grace2009

Thanks so much!!

Yeah, for sure! I do have the first draft of the first book posted somewhere on here, but it’s changed a lot since then. I’m actually planning to post the third draft as I edit it soon.

@loopylin

Well, now I really want to see it…

@savannah_grace2009

Ok, Marcurious sounds like a really cool character. 😁

@euodia-vision

Aww, thanks girl! I guess I haven’t really shared much writing on here lately. But I’ve started on the first draft of the second book, so I’ve been getting a lot more actual writing done. (Instead of just editing… editing… editing… 😂)

@savannah_grace2009

Do you mind if Hedieh finds Ottoline? Because she hasn’t really interacted with any of the other girls yet.

@esther-c

AWWW!! I’ve missed Ev and Ami!!! ❤