-GRCR-

IT’S JULY 29TH AND COSTCO HAS IT’S CHRISTMAS DECORATIONS UP. 😭😭😭 WHYYYYYYY.

@elishavet-pidyon

Haha!!! I literally had nothing to do for three days in the car. I read everything in the art section, everything in the general writing section. XD

Now that I’m going back to the beginning…

This is really hard XD

because I know you’re trying to go for the “chaos” vibes of a big family as they get ready for church and the party. You set up Hallie, Easton, and the parents pretty well, especially for the fast-paced scene, but the other siblings kind of disappear throughout the book.

Maybe…[Read more]

@esther-c

To be honest, I’m not really sure.

I might have to reread it a little more and let you know XD

@esther-c

Antonio gently wiped away one of her tears with his thumb. “Please don’t cry. I like it much better when I can see your eyes sparkle naturally.”

*squeals* OH MY GOODNESS.

I loved this book!  The scenes when Hallie is making up with her friends were so sweet!!!!!!!! I’m sad it’s over. I looked forward to the chapter dumps.…[Read more]

@esther-c

I would just like to see it set up a little more at the very beginning chapters.

I know you’re going for chaos on the Sunday morning before church, but like I mentioned before, since Easton and Hallie’s family is a big one, I think you need to focus more on their family and the dynamics. I’d love to see Hallie’s closeness with her mom…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!! you’re the best and I always love exchanging ideas with you <3

I LOVE LITTLE HALLIE

@esther-c

yeah, Cars and Phones BROKE ME

Last week my mom was at Mayo Clinic in Rochester doing more cancer treatments, which was hard since it wasn’t planned. I guess even if it was, it would be hard since she was gone for over a week and me and my siblings and my dad were all missing her a lot and attempting to keep our house from going out of…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Someone suggested I cut the last section of the blurb and leave it with the part about Jonathan’s friendship because it has more of a cliffhanger. What do you think?

@whalekeeper

On here works great!

Also, any thoughts on the book cover?

@keilah-h

also mmm, I love cheesecake.

Why do I feel like Sniper would like cheesecake? XD. I don’t know, I can just picture him denying that he enjoys it.

@loopylin @theducktator @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @keilah

Thanks everyone!

@grcr

*Gaspeth!!!*

What have you done!!!

🤣

Well, there goes that. XD

@theducktator

don’t encourage me.

@ellette-giselle

DON’T YOU DARE. *hides Evan*

@theducktator

Aha, thank you. Fixed that.

Thank you so much for the feedback!!!!

DON’T KILL EVAN. I BEG YOU.

Oh how tantalizing this sounds…….. it would be such a sad death scene……………..

@ellette-giselle

Characters:

~Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?

I thought all of them were. I guess Jonathan would be most interesting though.

~ Were there any character that need to be more engaging? If so, how would be some good ways for me to do that?

I always forget about Brian. He should…[Read more]

@theducktator

Awesome, thank you so much!!

@ellette-giselle

Nice! You hyphenated firstborn though, which is one word.