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@esther-c

Lolollol.

Ready??!……. You’re not gonna believe it……….

Mexican.

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Days passed, and slowly, Leon regained some of the strength he had lost. On the second week, he was told he could work if he wanted to, and he did so with a will. It was wonderful to be with Rolf again, and the work was not draining a…

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@ellette-giselle @linus-smallprint @theshadow @whalekeeper @keilah-h @theducktator @koshka

Two new chapters this week! They should be uploaded to the doc now. Excited to hear what y’all think!

I use Slack for work, and that might work, but again there would be more limitations on how many channels can be created, and messages disappearing after 90 days. I also don’t think GroupMe would work very well, from the minimal experience I’ve had with it. I’ve never had Discord, so I can’t speak for that one.

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@whalekeeper

Most of the research I do for my writing has to do with history… quite often I’ll be writing and then suddenly I’m like hmmmm how did this little detail fit into their lives?

This past week I was researching Christmas traditions in the 1800s, what kinds of gifts people gave one another, and trying to dive into how it would differ…[Read more]

@koshka

I’m glad it worked!!

Yes, poor Conrad.

🤨 That’s odd….. I feel like I said he DIDN’T cry. I can remember several times he would have, but he couldn’t. And there was the one time at the end where he cried, but I alluded to the fact that it would have been more sound than tears.

Maybe I’m missing something………..

@esther-c

Hey guess what?!?

I just ran into your character Hallie the other day!!! NO LIE! She looked EXACTLY like the face claim, she had the same personality from what I’ve read of your book!!!!

It was driving me crazy! She and her fiance were visiting our church and I grantee you I kept sneaking glances at her. She had on a black…[Read more]

@koshka @esther-c

I gotta work out exactly how Erich got into the US Army tbh😂🫣 I’m thinking it could’ve been a part of the offer for giving him a shorter sentence or something, but I gotta put more research into it

Or he just joined the Army after he had his sentence.

idk exactly yet. 😅 if I have to change things a bit I…

@godlyfantasy12 I’m on nowwwww 🤭

I’d be open to creating our own community. Slack would probably work for me, I’d have to check with my parents about Discord since I don’t have it yet. There’s also Group Me… which I don’t know much about, but plenty of youth groups seem to use it for announcements (not sure if you can create mini channels or anything like that.)

@linus-smallprint

😭😢

It’s okay…. I understand.

@ellette-giselle

Yep! I noticed that! 😆 “Teacher.” I like it.

@hybridlore

Awesome!! I’m so glad you liked it!!!

Yeah….. Rolf had a rough time of it, but he got out sooner, whereas Leon was in the bad situation longer… things just didn’t escalate so high.

btw, was it you who asked about him changing his name? Well, if it was, you now have an answer!

@ellette-giselle

I love the way you put us inside Rolf’s story instead of having him just tell it. It worked so much better. Also, the transitions were great.

Good section. The part about Conrad was sad, though. I don’t really have any big critiques. Great job!

@theshadow

It looks good! I don’t have any major critiques. It is a very short chapter, but it does a good job of building on the tension. Also, I like the way you described the trees.

It seems a little weird that Olivia and Adeline and Dylan don’t seem to care about their families… well, maybe Dylan a little bit.

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Interesting POV switch. A new technique I tried out for telling long stories rather then having a ton of first-person dialogue. Let me know what y’all think.

The sixteenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
September 9th
The Empire<…

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@theshadow

Oooo!! I like this!! This is getting good!

And, what if, what if we don’t make it?

This is a little cluncky because of the punctuation. If you did: “And what if–– what if we don’t make it?” or “And what if. . . what if we don’t make it?” either of those would work well. Use the dash if you want it to read as a sudden horrif…[Read more]

@keilah-h

@hybridlore

Thanks you two.

As for online, I don’t trust it. I’ve heard and seen too many online things get hacked for my liking. 😅

Thanks for the suggestion though!

@keilah-h

That one.

@keilah-h

The one that hit Florida. Milton, I think.

Thanks!