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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 3 days ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 3 days ago
lovely.
This is just where an author wants her reader.
And, because I am a nice author, I will give you a little gift and go edit up the next section and post it, all for you yourself.
🙂
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 3 days ago
Okay, now I’m dying to read the rest. 😂
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 3 days ago
(I’m fighting so hard for Adrian. 😂)
I know, and the sad/funny thing is that it doesn’t matter what you say, this is the 4th draft, so whether he dies or not is already decided and isn’t changing.
Maybe God’s not done with Adrian yet.
Your right.
But maybe He’s ready to call this young soldier home.
I don’t know what his d…
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 3 days ago
I get what you’re saying. But unrealistic things can happen in stories. Maybe God’s not done with Adrian yet. I don’t know what his death would accomplish that Aaron’s didn’t —besides *maybe* changing Julian’s heart. But that could be just as easily done by Adrian’s capture.
It feels redundant to me. Aaron and Adrian are so s…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 3 days ago
(You already killed off Aaron. Isn’t that enough for you?? 😭)
*gasp* how dare you! I never killed Aaron. The Empire did.
So there.
But honestly there are times when you can’t get around it. I’m not killing characters just to be depressing or violent. I’m doing it for good reasons. Plus, I have to follow the rules of my world. It w…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 3 days ago
I love stories where good characters die. It’s so refreshing after all this impossible happily ever after on earth for everyone we might have liked plus some.
😳😳😳😳
You love stories where good characters DIE???
Ok, I see what you’re getting at. Every story doesn’t need to be a happy ever after, but it shouldn’t be depress…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 3 days ago
Ah, well, we don’t always get our way.
Don’t do this to your readers. Your book will get thrown across the room. He needs to be rescued. Maybe Julian should help him escape.
lololol,
I wouldn’t throw my books across the room. I love stories where good characters die. It’s so refreshing after all this impossible happily ever a…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 3 days ago
Anyway. I need to go do some school but I found the old forum where you posted parts of the first book, so I’ll be catching up on that later.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 3 days ago
Exactly!! Jk. Kind of. I think we need Adrian/Julian by themselves. Unless that’s not realistic for what they would let a prisoner do… idk.
I know! Poor Julian. And now he thinks his brother is going to die..(which he CAN’T!)
why? what’s stopping me?
I WILL! 😤 Anyway, you already killed off Aaron. Don’t do this to your readers.…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 3 days ago
And I am not satisfied with the confrontation. They need another scene. *plops down stubbornly* I really love brother dynamics … 😅
ME TOO! I love brother dynamics.
So what your saying is, Julian didn’t yell at him enough and should do some more?
lolololol.
Poor Julian, he must be so hurt and confused.
Anyway. You CANNOT kill A…
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 3 days ago
Nope. Nothing. One reaction to that scene.
Yes, I am getting attached to Adrian! He is so sweet to Joseph! And I am not satisfied with the confrontation. They need another scene. *plops down stubbornly* I really love brother dynamics … 😅
Anyway. You CANNOT kill Adrian too. 😖
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 3 days ago
That’s it.
That’s all you have to say? Nothing about my skilled word choice and flowing verbs!
(lololololol 100% joking!)
Are you getting attached to Adrian?
Btw, there was your Julian/Adrian confrontation. Did it go how you expected?
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 3 days ago
Ellette, if you kill off Adrian too… 😭😤
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 3 days ago
And then I go and hide because I feel like Koshka is going to have it out for me.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 3 days ago
@hybridlore  @linus-smallprint   @koshka  @keilah-h
NEXT SECTION!!!!!!
The days passed one by one. Adrian remained in hiding, and Joseph spent more and more time with him, listening as he told stories of his early childhood with his brother– the days before the army.
Adrain spent hours in study, and Joseph was often at his side, re…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 week, 3 days ago
Thank you so much!!!!
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hybridlore replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 week, 3 days ago
Of course! Don’t feel ashamed to ask for prayer. No one’s life is perfect and we all have stuff going on.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Short Short Story Prompt War! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 week, 3 days ago
Oh my goodness!! Can you send me a link!!!!???
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 week, 3 days ago
Gak! Peter and Ruben’s sister. Not brother.
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