GodlyFantasy12

@loopylin

Ooooh! I really like it!!

@mineralizedwritings

well… you can barely see it… darn.

@mineralizedwritings

Thank you so much!!

Lol go ahead and use it for a bit if you like! I’m not terribly attached because it was just a sketchy thing XD

Of course!

Ooooh, really? Well, since freedom’s currently using it I’ll put it as my cover image…

@whalekeeper

Maybe before the dance, we shop for outfits? There are so many shops nearby! The whole school could cancel classes today for it!

And some of the boys have yet to ask the girls! 😈

YES! But yeah, we should for sure wait for Godly, she was so excited.

I can’t remember who was going to ask Riya… I think @freedomwriter76 ‘s Bucky. But…[Read more]

@esther-c

Aww, thanks girl! I guess I haven’t really shared much writing on here lately. But I’ve started on the first draft of the second book, so I’ve been getting a lot more actual writing done. (Instead of just editing… editing… editing… 😂)

Of course! OH YAY!! So has editing book one been the main thing? How has it gone?

@smiley

I’m loving it!!

@savannah_grace2009

I like that a lot better! It’s really up to you, though. Rae had some good feedback!

@hybridlore

You’re welcome!

There’s a lot of things I could say in reply, but I think the best thing to do would be spend a long time on worldbuilding. The more worldbuilding you do, the more will become clear, and the world will seem more real to the viewers. I know pantsing if fun, and you can totally do it, but it sounds like it might be…[Read more]

@everyone

Sounds like a plan!!! 😊💕

I can’t wait to go shopping!!

The girls can go to the mall, and the guys can be dragged along and it will be totally awesome 😜😝

And I’ll have to think of a villain I can twist up into a moody teenager. *cracks knuckles*

@loopylin

Room assignments have just kinda meshed together, so you can pretty much roo…[Read more]

@trailblazer

Yayy! Looks good! I don’t mind the summary kind of telling, I think it works well for this story.

@esther-c

That’s okay! Thank you!

@hybridlore

I can’t really think of anything right now, but I’ll definitely think it over and get back to you on it!

@mineralizedwritings

I think Katrin needs a goal. even if it isn’t the typical dystopian goal about overtoppleing the government. She can also pursue one goal, then realize she has to reach even higher if you really want to push the climax. Maybe that’s when she gets a little help from side characters, or remembers the things she has learned ove…

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@rae

Sounds good!! I love your style, btw. It’s fresh and unique. 😊

@savannah_grace2009

I don’t think it’s too clunky. There may be a few places where it could be made a little smoother, but I’m not sure how to fix that. 😅 If this is just your first or second draft, then I think it’s definitely fine how it is. 🙂

@thearcaneaxiom

I agree with Min and Jonas on everything they said. Resolve of the character will balance the unresolved political structure.However there’s still a lot of things you could do to end it differently. For one thing, most dystopias almost never talk about what happens after they take down the government. They need to reestablish e…

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@grcr

Thank you!

Also, @savannah_grace2009 I was gonna ask, how does she know that Lilitu dreamed exactly what happened to her before he even describes what happens?

@savannah_grace2009

I didn’t really notice it seeming clunky! I like the part where she’s thinking back to playing pretend with her friends, it’s so sweet.

Personally, for the flashback part, I think I would leave it out and give more of like a summary, sort of like:

She knew that this was no ordinary dream. And not just because of his reaction.…

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@freedomwriter76

Nice!

@savannah_grace2009

Yep! Here’s one I made for my WIP a while ago! Hopefully this doesn’t post twice, lol.