GodlyFantasy12

@rae

I like the deer-like appearance of the unicorn. It also seems like a fun resolution scene. Family reunion scenes are the best. I can also picture Chase on the cushions well, because I know what it feels like to be an invalid now and then but still participate in family activities.

I feel like the blindness bit was too much? I mean for Chase…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

If you want to share your plot outline and story details, I could try to help you with a blurb!

@ellette-giselle

6 or 7!

@ellette-giselle

7 looks so nice with the boxed section on top. You could even try something similar on the bottom with your name, but this still looks good.

@thearcaneaxiom

I agree with every single thing you said. 🙃 And thank you,  I’m glad you agree with me that she’s looking for some recognition.

What I would ask is who is she trying to get approval from?

I don’t know her family too well, but I’m sure she realizes her parents wouldn’t have a good reaction to so much serious material in her work.…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

1, 2, and 7 are my favorites.

You believe in me when I can’t believe in myself.

Not to downplay Ellette’s opinion 😅 I didn’t really mind this part. To me, when I read this part, it’s more about the value of self-worth. You need people to believe in you, even if you can’t sometimes. I have low self-esteem sometimes and I need my mom to put me back on track. If we tell o…[Read more]

@rae

I forgot about this. I might join if it gets started, but I don’t have any ideas for what to do next.

@theshadow @anyone

~ Mentions of several sensitive topics all at once, sensitive people should not read ~

I really want to give an example of a too-dark story idea so Shadow doesn’t feel too bad about the atomic bomb idea.

I know a girl who is writing a fanfic love story. In it, the guy gets sent to war before making a proposal. Many of his…[Read more]

@keilah-h

This is still a serious topic though, I agree with you. I’ve seen darker on this website from a graphic perspective. Not to attack Godly, but she once posted a roleplay with a rather disgusting abuse description. I had to skip over it for my little sisters.

The abuse topic is strange to me. I feel almost numb to it because we’ve talked…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I didn’t mind that new revelation because it was barely mentioned. It goes right over a little kid’s head. And a Pythonos/Payne baby is an interesting challenge.

But I understand @keilah-h because the age at which you learned about these things makes a difference. If a teen writer is new to real-world dark stuff, they like to…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I wouldn’t mind helping if you need it! Though I’ve never written out a full blurb before

@freed_and_redeemed

Yay!! I love it!!

@ellette-giselle

That’s sooo awesome!! I love the art!! I’d recommend softening the word color though, the black is a really sharp contrast with the pale cover, but I think it’s amazing!

@theducktator

I think it should be done however enhances your reading experience, but I prefer to look at the map for a while appreciate the art a little, then hope it will help my mental geography during the book but really knowing that when I look back at it later I was completely off…

😂😅

@ellette-giselle

So, on the front cover, I agree that the title feels a little cramped. Maybe enlarge it a little and move your name to the bottom?

Also, I would remove the “By:” and just put your name. In my opinion, it feels more professional, but it’s up to you if you like that version more.

The cover illustration is beautiful!

On the back,…[Read more]

*considers what characters I should have drawn next…*

@ellette-giselle

I’ll try my best to read through your WIP, but I can’t make any promises since I’m also helping two other people with their stories. (:

@ellette-giselle

That is so cool!!

@ellette-giselle

It sounds really cool! Are you looking for format critiques, or is it too late for that?