Felicity

@jonas

That’s fair. It’s true that you don’t want to become preachy about things, but I’m just thinking that if this really is the same God we worship, then that would mean that the same principles of the fall and atonement would be present. Perhaps it could take a completely different form than that, but it could still be there. It could also be…[Read more]

@jonas

I’m in the middle of OB as well, but I looked through your thoughts on the books before. I agree with Whale’s assessment on Kaladin. Suffering is what makes characters interesting to me personally, as well as how they deal with said suffering. Kaladin was often wallowing yes, and obviously not without good reason, but it can still get…[Read more]

YUS SEBBY!!

@jonas

I like it! So this is within a multiverse of sorts with our universe? Is earth perhaps one of the 12 planets, or is this a different reality completely that God created? Are you going to express the need of a Savior, since this is the same loving Heavenly Father?

Malgrium’s name feels to reminiscent of Melcore and Morgoth to me. Though I…[Read more]

One idea for a magic system that’s been banging around in my head for a while now, but I haven’t quite been able to figure it out is a paradox magic system. I’m specifically thinking of things like russels paradox. Imagine a magic system that is in some way analogues to the principles of set theory. It is a perfectly consistent system, where if…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium

Love it! It’s a solid, straight forward system. I agree with Jonas’ assessment, though perhaps there are more creative ways of exploring that other than just making it a higher rank. Like what if they are the analogues of the previous two simply expressed by a different people, race, gender, ect. Or perhaps the Soulbinders…[Read more]

@calyhuge luv it! So long as it doesn’t bother his dormies XD but I doubt it will

@jonas

That’s fair, though it doesn’t need to be a full fledged language for things like fantasy. Just enough to have an extra aspect of your world. Brandon Sanderson doesn’t put too much stress on it, just alluding to different concepts in the languages he doesn’t care to explore. I really like to make them though, there’s another dimension of…[Read more]

@jonas

Although Critiques is also a good one to go on for particularly, well, critiquing your writing.

A conlang is a Constructed Language. A language that is made by one or a few people for some purpose. Tolkien popularized conlanging for things like fantasy.

@jonas

Just so I know, where would the best place on the forum be for that? I’m stilling getting used to everything.

Hmmm, there’s actually quite a few places. You can go through the General Writing Discussions page, and look through the most active forums, like the Place to Share… is one, but I would probably make my own on General Writing D…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @whalekeeper

Paxton

Paxton nodded, glancing around the hall. This wasn’t exactly the best place to stay…his brothers could come upon them at any moment!

Riker stood, gently lifting Paxton out of his lap and helping him stand. He put out his hand, smiling.

“Ready?”

Paxton gripped his backpack, staring at Riker’s hand for a mom…[Read more]

@loopylin

I haven’t been active in the castle in a while either. It’s kinda been dead. I don’t even know when the last time I RPed in here lol XD

If no one else wants to I could have one of my new characters meet yours? I’m just barely coming up with their design so they really need to be expanded on 😅

@loopylin

Awww cute!! I love the siblings (especially Cody 🥰)

@jonas

With Dynamism, it will either be the same direction as the original object or the direction of the user’s choice. My decision will probably be based on balance. I would say Dynamism is probably the most powerful ability, so it might make sense to give it that limitation.

That makes sense, I would lean towards the limitation as well. It m…[Read more]

@jonas

Wow, that is a very interesting system. I think I get it, but that might be the most technical magic system I’ve ever seen. I like how it seems that you’re basically inventing your own science for your world.

Thanks! That is basically the idea, all conventional physics I threw out the window, not to be replaced by absurdity, but simpl…[Read more]

@jonas

Ok, now for yours, these sound like really fun magic systems! I can definitely see the Sandersonisms, but they’re still definitely their own thing.

The Crystal magic system reminds me a bit of my own, as it is about crystalline structures manipulating fundamental aspects of reality. I do have a question on Dynamism though, when kinetic…[Read more]

I am anxiously (excitedly XD) awaiting Jakob’s reaction/response to Seb 🤣

@whalekeeper @freedomwritee76

@whalekeeper @freedomwriter76

Paxton

Paxton stared at the bruise Bucky had revealed, eyes widening a bit. He looked from Bucky to the blonde standing behind him, and then Erich, and then the other boy with them…

And then Riker.

Did…did they have more marks like Bucky’s bruise?

Marks like Paxton had?

They…did understand…

Paxton stared on…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12 @freedomwriter76

Feather

“We will walk around and search for some food, but you will not lay a hand on anyone…especially my wife. There is no need for violence.” Felix snapped.

“He has a point.” Feather told Crosshair. He put away his weapon and turned away, but not without a final glare at the group.

Someone walked up beh…[Read more]

@smiley lol not like a kid, more like a little brother to me.