Felicity

@jonas

So I’ve been really bad at following up on this thread for quite a while now, as well as KP in general lately. I’ve sort of skimmed through, but you’ve probably done a lot since you last posted. Is there still anything specific you would like my thoughts on still?

@whalekeeper

Oh noo! Hydration is important!!!

They are basically sci-fi retellings of fairy tales all jammed into one world. So like rupunzel, cinderella, snow white, and little red riding hood, but the stories have been adapted to fit a sci fi world. I do not recommend the second one but the 1st and 3rd have been really good so far! The main…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Yeah it is, actually. 😂 I didn’t want to write about someone getting married so I chose adoption instead. XDD

Oh and for those of you wondering, Ami’s type 2.

@freedomwriter76 @lightoverdarkness6 @hybridlore @whalekeeper @mineralizedwritings @smiley @savannah_grace2009 @rae @grcr @anyone-else

Sooo… I was working on some “character-building” the past day or so, and I’ve fixed my MCs’ character arcs/internal conflicts to tie into the theme more and so I can write them better/more accurately. (With a l…[Read more]

@smiley

Ack! Sorry I’m late, but I finally found time to read this. M’kay…

So the one big thing that I noticed was a lot of telling and info-dumping. I could handle the information, but it’s not always enjoyable to read a bunch of backstory. Stuff like that should be sprinkled throughout. Besides that, there were a few places where things…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Of course! (:

@savannah_grace2009 @hybridlore @highscribeofaetherium @jonas @anyone

Ok, so I have bad writing, but my worst writing I deleted years ago!!! 😭 There was three chapters of a book I wrote on my parents computer when I was like 7, I tried to start a few books when I was 9/10/11, I had an almost completed book around 11, but I still have a book I…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I think so! You can go ahead and RP first if you want. 🙃

@whalekeeper

Lol I thought you didn’t see my post but it turns out I didn’t get a notif because I’m now mimeralizedwritings😂

Hi!! (Sorry about seeing this only now, the KP ghost regularly eats my notifs)

Totally ok!

Doing okay, especially since it’s Christmas. I got some drawing books and a really beautiful art book by a guy named Omar Rayyan. A…

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@rae

The writing you shared was a little depressing, but the characters weren’t melodramatic at least. I don’t pay much attention to punctuation as a writing problem. The art of melodrama is at an all time high here though. Like “He grabbed Nejin by the collar of his shirt, his eyes radiating hate, and rage.” After Nejin, a little boy he never…[Read more]

Oh, and this garbage:

“Shele” he said, turning around, immediately bumping into a tall, yet frail man.

 

He grabbed Nejin by the collar of his shirt, his eyes radiating hate, and rage.

Adrenaline rushed through Nejin’s system, but it gave no resolve to run or fight. Guards charged in, clearing the area, tackling the Man to the ground, losin…

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@savannah_grace2009

This is some of my writing I want to burn, bury the remnants in a dark cave, then collapse the cave to never see the light of day again, but here it is for you to enjoy…

“Mailes?… Do you think me a good Jan?” Laijas asked. Surprise stunned Mailes, what kind of question was that? It didn’t sound like something Laijas would…

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@freedomwriter76

Oh I’m so excited for this!! I joined kp after you started the fanfic, so I didn’t get to follow along from the beginning.

OH! And I have Hallie and Easton who I have not RPed for yet but will do so now…

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Easton

“So, are you glad you came? You seem very confident with that waltz now.”

“Yep!” Hallie flashed him her signature smile. “I’m glad you came along.”

Easton bobbed his head in a small laugh. “Anytime. But…” he peered over the heads of students. “Looks lik…[Read more]

Oki. I don’t know how y’all want to switch it up, but I have Fynn, Callista, Lukas, Ami, and Ev available for any other charries to dance with rn. XD So take your pick, lol.

@savannah_grace2009

Ooh, I love it. 😁 I love dogs too. 😝

@rae

Nahimmmm!!! 😭

@hybridlore

I like it!! I can’t really think of any thing else to add besides what the others have said. But there was one paragraph that I was a little confused at:

My gaze snaps back to the ground. The source of the voice stands beside me—a man, maybe in his thirties. From his clothes and his unshaved face, he appears to be a worker of some kin…

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@trailblazer

Oh yeah, our tree is super full every year. And Mom and Dad don’t even put all of their ornaments on it. XD

Yessss! I’m in! Now that the holidays are over, I should be able to get back into a normal routine of writing again. (: