Faith Kindred

I think most of it figured out now. Thanks. 😉

Also, when I think of futuristic stuff, I think of lots of cameras. Very tiny but high quality cameras that can be stuck in corners of rooms or flown around on tiny drones (or drones that look like animals).

I think one way to write a good cliffhanger is to reveal a sudden twist and then break off as everyone is staring at the character who’s revealed himself (or whatever). If it’s a chapter end, you could go to someone else in the next chapter (if you have more than one pov). Or you could end a book that way. That’s what I’m doing in the second book…[Read more]

I’ve never done it, but I might try next year. Let me know how it goes.

All I have to say is exercise. Stay active. It will help you concentrate.

Yes! I am. Word limits are the bane of my existence, but it’s good to practice squeezing as much meaning as you can into as few words as possible. It’ll improve us in the end.

At least, that’s a good thing to tell myself.

You got it. That works great.

Well, you know there are those things that will focus in on sounds even miles away so you can literally be sitting on your front porch and hear what your neighbor is saying even though you normally couldn’t hear him even if he was shouting. I imagine such people would use those even if they aren’t very futuristic.

I’m absolutely terrible at thinking up futuristic gadgets but I just wanted to say that this book sounds amazing! 🙂

The coming of dawn

First of all, walkie talkie watches are not that hi tech. The apple watch is basically that plus the iPhone. I would suggest hologram computers. Check out the topic “futuristic weapons” if you haven’t yet. Gecko gloves sound cool, but how would you keep them from falling off? I could see the boot things, but I think a metal detector looking thing…[Read more]

Okay. I’ll play around with it and see what I can come up with. Thanks!

I think the sword line works pretty well considering the rhyme works. It’s better than anything else I can think of, even though I did comment on it. The bow line could probably be more powerful though.

Hahahahahaha! That’s what you call short and sweet right there, Hope. Setting. Conflict. Climax. Resolution.

That’s your basic story.

Thanks @Daeus! Hm… I’m not sure what I could add to that line. Any suggestions?

Glad you like it, Hope! I see what you’re saying, definitely, but about the sword, ‘Sharpness’ was supposed to slant rhyme with ‘Darkness’. Any suggestions to get around this?

Alright…but I was only 8. I don’t have the exact words of the story, but this is pretty much it.

Hope and Joy went to the park. A dog ran at them. An angel came and scared the dog away.
The End

I love it…I somehow missed seeing it the first time around. I do have one suggestion, though it’s more personal option on wording and not on the flow.

The shield is shattered,
The bow is not bent,
And the sword has now lost
All its sharpness.

I love the first line, but I think second line would be more powerful if it said something about…[Read more]

Small pen guns are cool. And I always love the concealed weapons in sleeves and such. Hmm, there could be things that look like perfume except if it’s inhaled it will put the enemy to sleep. There can also be cameras on buttons or pens in a person’s pocket. Or there can be other tiny cameras planted around (or even trackers planted on the…[Read more]