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Hope Ann replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 10 months ago
Anna, shuddering as she looks at creature: “If I use the whole charge on my pistol I might be to-” *Monster starts to charge again* *Anna twists the gauge on her pistol to allow the whole charge to shoot at once and shoots at creature* *Monster wallows in mud, smashing against side of boat and almost overturning it before sinking into mud.* *Anna…[Read more]
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Daeus replied to the topic Bad heroes, messed up protagonists, and character arcs in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 years, 10 months ago
Make him learn about the attack last minute and try to stop it, but fail. This will wise him up a bit and give him an element of sadness which will make him all the more interesting.
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Daeus replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 10 months ago
Rameaux: *Mutterings about gun followed by silent contemplation on the issue. Picks up pistol and hurls it with great force at monster. Strikes it in the head*
*Monster halts its charge and twists in the mirk then lifts its ugly head above the water in rage and hisses menacingly also showing its deadly fangs.*
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Bad heroes, messed up protagonists, and character arcs in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 years, 10 months ago
Okay. Great. Wonderful. I like this.
So when do we pick up? Maybe Alex hid his family before he went into the whole ‘outlaw’ business, and we pick up where Walter finally discovers where they are and decides to go after them. Serves them right, after all. They’re affiliated with terrorists.
Does Alex know of the meditated attack and try to stop…[Read more]
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 10 months ago
(Hm… *chuckles diabolically, rubs long, slender white hands together* Rosey won’t be here tomorrow… No seriously, I’ll certainly do my part to respect Quinn. We could just knock him out, then we’d have to carry him and wouldn’t have to worry about messing up his character. 😉 😛 )
Arianwen: *kneels by side of boat, draws knife and sweeps…[Read more] -
Kate Flournoy replied to the topic What I wrote (late) for last week's writing prompt in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 10 months ago
Yes! You did great. I honestly can’t find anything to pick on, and that’s big coming from me. 😛
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Rosey Mucklestone replied to the topic What I wrote (late) for last week's writing prompt in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 10 months ago
I couldn’t tell there was a word limit there at all, Amanda. Great job! 😀
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Rosey Mucklestone replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 10 months ago
Quinn: It’s swimming to the other side. Building momentum for another charge at us. We’ll have one shot at it before we’re capsized. *pulls out dagger* Everyone take a different spot along the side of the boat. One of us is going to get it.
(I’m not going to be on tomorrow. You guys feel free to use Quinn if need be. Just don’t make him give any…[Read more]
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Daeus replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 10 months ago
Rameaux: “What now? If we don’t kill it in one blow, it will overturn our boat. Can anyone see its head?”
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Daeus replied to the topic What I wrote (late) for last week's writing prompt in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 10 months ago
Nothing to complain of. That was great.
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Rosey Mucklestone replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 10 months ago
Quinn: *tips head to look at compass* we’ve drifted a little bit more north, but not to far off. I’d go for that shore, to the west, though. It’s more clear and we could get back on course from …
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Daeus replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 10 months ago
Rameaux: *Watching scaly creature warily and poising dagger* “If we can find land. Are we still headed in the same direction?”
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Rosey Mucklestone replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 10 months ago
Quinn: I pray we run into no more of her evil sort. *watches the edges of the swamp* that serpent wasn’t the only one… *pulls oar out of the water as a dragon-like thing snaps at it, tearing a bit of the wood off* I’m beginning to think land might be a better bet. Everyone keep your weapons near.
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Daeus replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 10 months ago
Rameaux: Thank you, but I’m close enough killed already and pained for sure. It will heal though.
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 10 months ago
Arianwen: *horrified* “You have what?!”
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Hope Ann replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 10 months ago
Anna: “I knew that wasn’t Tolkien!” *furrows brow and looks at Rameaux* “Are you alright? I have some painkillers if you need them.”
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Daeus replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 10 months ago
Rameaux: *Takes hand and climbs eagerly back into canoe. Groans in pain but sits down and takes it.* “My powder is ruined. I am down to a dagger.”
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 10 months ago
Arianwen: *catches breath sharply, half rises in seat and draws sword over her shoulder, sends it flying end over end through the air* *it lands in water with splash and sticks* *tentacles lash, something roars, then tentacles disappear in bubbling water with gurgling sound* *Arianwen reaches over side of boat, extends hand to Rameaux* “Haste, my…[Read more]
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Daeus replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 10 months ago
Tolkien:
“The water is scalding
The water will freeze
The water will eat you
So stay away please”*Stands up and backs to then end of boat* “Survive if you can!” *Suddenly transforms into an ugly hag and leap over board.*
Rameaux: “The witch!” *Rises and fires. He hits. The hag screams and then vanishes into the water and never comes up.…[Read more]
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Daeus replied to the topic Bad heroes, messed up protagonists, and character arcs in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 years, 10 months ago
He is a solo, constantly evading capture. A master of every kind of trick, he can never be caught. In response, Walter will increase his own power and equally his own corruption.
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