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  • #7565
    Hope Ann
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      Anna: β€œWell, I guess that’s fairly cool.” *rests hand lightly on pistol and looks at ghost* β€œSo we just need to row this boat across the swamp?”

      INTJ - Inhumane. No-feelings. Terrible. Judgment and doom on everyone.

      #7566
      Rosey Mucklestone
      @writefury
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        Quinn: *steps in slowly* I hope the hull is sturdy enough to hold up to all those snags.

        #7567
        Daeus
        @daeus
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          Rameaux: β€œQuinn, you have experience with boats, take this oar. I’ll take the other and if I cause us to go to far to the right, I can simply correct it by going to far to the left.

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          #7568
          Rosey Mucklestone
          @writefury
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            Quinn: Right. *takes the other oar* *hands compass to Anna* Hold this and make sure we keep on course, please.

            #7569
            Daeus
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              All characters in the boat, they set off.

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              #7570
              Kate Flournoy
              @kate-flournoy
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                Arianwen: *grips side of boat, leans over and touches water with fingertips.* *jerks hand back with sharp cry* β€œThe water is scalding!”

                Daeus
                @daeus
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                  Tolkien:
                  β€œThe water is scalding
                  The water will freeze
                  The water will eat you
                  So stay away please”

                  *Stands up and backs to then end of boat* β€œSurvive if you can!” *Suddenly transforms into an ugly hag and leap over board.*

                  Rameaux: β€œThe witch!” *Rises and fires. He hits. The hag screams and then vanishes into the water and never comes up. Incidentally, Rameaux looses his balance and falls into the water. He struggles to the surface and takes a deep breath. A huge black slithery form is perceived snaking through the reeking filth of liquid directly towards him.*

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                  #7574
                  Kate Flournoy
                  @kate-flournoy
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                    Arianwen: *catches breath sharply, half rises in seat and draws sword over her shoulder, sends it flying end over end through the air* *it lands in water with splash and sticks* *tentacles lash, something roars, then tentacles disappear in bubbling water with gurgling sound* *Arianwen reaches over side of boat, extends hand to Rameaux* β€œHaste, my lord! Haste, before you are boiled alive!”

                    Daeus
                    @daeus
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                      Rameaux: *Takes hand and climbs eagerly back into canoe. Groans in pain but sits down and takes it.* β€œMy powder is ruined. I am down to a dagger.”

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                      #7576
                      Hope Ann
                      @hope
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                        Anna: β€œI knew that wasn’t Tolkien!” *furrows brow and looks at Rameaux* β€œAre you alright? I have some painkillers if you need them.”

                        INTJ - Inhumane. No-feelings. Terrible. Judgment and doom on everyone.

                        #7577
                        Kate Flournoy
                        @kate-flournoy
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                          Arianwen: *horrified* β€œYou have what?!”

                          Daeus
                          @daeus
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                            Rameaux: Thank you, but I’m close enough killed already and pained for sure. It will heal though.

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                            #7579
                            Rosey Mucklestone
                            @writefury
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                              Quinn: I pray we run into no more of her evil sort. *watches the edges of the swamp* that serpent wasn’t the only one… *pulls oar out of the water as a dragon-like thing snaps at it, tearing a bit of the wood off* I’m beginning to think land might be a better bet. Everyone keep your weapons near.
                              *water stirs with shining scales again*

                              #7580
                              Daeus
                              @daeus
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                                Rameaux: *Watching scaly creature warily and poising dagger* β€œIf we can find land. Are we still headed in the same direction?”

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                                #7582
                                Rosey Mucklestone
                                @writefury
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                                  Quinn: *tips head to look at compass* we’ve drifted a little bit more north, but not to far off. I’d go for that shore, to the west, though. It’s more clear and we could get back on course from …
                                  *ship jolts as a dragon bumps it from underneath*

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