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Daeus replied to the topic Bad heroes, messed up protagonists, and character arcs in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 years, 9 months ago
Make him learn about the attack last minute and try to stop it, but fail. This will wise him up a bit and give him an element of sadness which will make him all the more interesting.
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Daeus replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 9 months ago
Rameaux: *Mutterings about gun followed by silent contemplation on the issue. Picks up pistol and hurls it with great force at monster. Strikes it in the head*
*Monster halts its charge and twists in the mirk then lifts its ugly head above the water in rage and hisses menacingly also showing its deadly fangs.*
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Bad heroes, messed up protagonists, and character arcs in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 years, 9 months ago
Okay. Great. Wonderful. I like this.
So when do we pick up? Maybe Alex hid his family before he went into the whole ‘outlaw’ business, and we pick up where Walter finally discovers where they are and decides to go after them. Serves them right, after all. They’re affiliated with terrorists.
Does Alex know of the meditated attack and try to stop…[Read more]
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 9 months ago
(Hm… *chuckles diabolically, rubs long, slender white hands together* Rosey won’t be here tomorrow… No seriously, I’ll certainly do my part to respect Quinn. We could just knock him out, then we’d have to carry him and wouldn’t have to worry about messing up his character. 😉 😛 )
Arianwen: *kneels by side of boat, draws knife and sweeps…[Read more] -
Kate Flournoy replied to the topic What I wrote (late) for last week's writing prompt in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 9 months ago
Yes! You did great. I honestly can’t find anything to pick on, and that’s big coming from me. 😛
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Daeus replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 9 months ago
Rameaux: “What now? If we don’t kill it in one blow, it will overturn our boat. Can anyone see its head?”
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Daeus replied to the topic What I wrote (late) for last week's writing prompt in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 9 months ago
Nothing to complain of. That was great.
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Daeus replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 9 months ago
Rameaux: *Watching scaly creature warily and poising dagger* “If we can find land. Are we still headed in the same direction?”
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Daeus replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 9 months ago
Rameaux: Thank you, but I’m close enough killed already and pained for sure. It will heal though.
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 9 months ago
Arianwen: *horrified* “You have what?!”
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Daeus replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 9 months ago
Rameaux: *Takes hand and climbs eagerly back into canoe. Groans in pain but sits down and takes it.* “My powder is ruined. I am down to a dagger.”
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 9 months ago
Arianwen: *catches breath sharply, half rises in seat and draws sword over her shoulder, sends it flying end over end through the air* *it lands in water with splash and sticks* *tentacles lash, something roars, then tentacles disappear in bubbling water with gurgling sound* *Arianwen reaches over side of boat, extends hand to Rameaux* “Haste, my…[Read more]
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Daeus replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 9 months ago
Tolkien:
“The water is scalding
The water will freeze
The water will eat you
So stay away please”*Stands up and backs to then end of boat* “Survive if you can!” *Suddenly transforms into an ugly hag and leap over board.*
Rameaux: “The witch!” *Rises and fires. He hits. The hag screams and then vanishes into the water and never comes up.…[Read more]
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Daeus replied to the topic Bad heroes, messed up protagonists, and character arcs in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 years, 9 months ago
He is a solo, constantly evading capture. A master of every kind of trick, he can never be caught. In response, Walter will increase his own power and equally his own corruption.
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Bad heroes, messed up protagonists, and character arcs in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 years, 9 months ago
Well I thought so. 🙂
So Alex is an outlaw while Walter goes and gets a job in the government. Fantastic contrast. Hm… should we make this a sly commentary on governmental corruption? Just kidding. 😀
Now what? Walter works his way up the ranks, building an undercover army of his own terrorists (only of course he doesn’t call them that) all…[Read more]
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Kate Flournoy replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 9 months ago
Arianwen: *grips side of boat, leans over and touches water with fingertips.* *jerks hand back with sharp cry* “The water is scalding!”
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Daeus replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 9 months ago
All characters in the boat, they set off.
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Daeus replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 9 months ago
Rameaux: “Quinn, you have experience with boats, take this oar. I’ll take the other and if I cause us to go to far to the right, I can simply correct it by going to far to the left.
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Daeus replied to the topic Inter-genre Island in the forum Short Story Critiques 10 years, 9 months ago
Tolkien: *Nods in a most ghost like manner.* Another noise is headed in the ground and the canoe is lifted up and out into the bog. *Steps into canoe* “Beware the snakes” *Strange glint in eye*
Rameaux: *Gets in canoe as well, holding his pistol all the while.*
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Daeus replied to the topic Bad heroes, messed up protagonists, and character arcs in the forum General Writing Discussions 10 years, 9 months ago
Yes, the police. And he would become an outlaw. Splendid.
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