Karina Sanchez

What @Daeus said. 🙂

One line I really liked was

He is my Shepard, my Rock and my Song.

It’s beautiful. 🙂

What @Daeus said. 🙂

One line I really liked was

He is my Shepard, my Rock and my Song.

Hey, I like this! I love the quirky, matter-of-fact narrator voice and the concise, efficiently steady pace.

Only a few things— this line

and spoke a brief conversation in Swahili

is a little odd. I think it’s just the ‘spoke a brief conversation’. Is there another way to say this?
Also, I would have liked a description of Savanna…[Read more]

@rolena-hatfield

My analysis is that this is a really good poem that just needs to loose a little weight. You see, with poetry, you write phrases based on flow, not how you are used to hearing them. I figure the best way to explain this is just to show you what I would take off.

God is gracious, He is kind.
He keeps my heart and guards my…[Read more]

At the very least I’d be painfully aware of how much more capably my brother could handle the situation if he were here.

Yes, you oldest children have no idea… 😉 😛

hmm, well you have an older sibling and I don’t and I am also independently minded so perhaps I am assuming too much.

Hm, for some reason my link didn’t work. I’ll try it again. short story forum

Let’s see if that works. :/

Yes, post it, @bluejay! There’s a for short stories here. 🙂

Well obviously it depends on their relationship… but for my part, if I had an older brother whom I really, really admired and looked up to, that’s what I’d ask myself, especially if I wasn’t very experienced myself.

For my part, I very much doubt my brother would ever ask what I would do in his circumstances.

@Daeus I’m sure we all thank you we don’t live in a black hole. We are very grateful. 😉

@Joy-Schmidt okay… I think I got it. I’ll just ask a few general questions to get you started. First off, is he cautious because he doesn’t have experience? If so, the caution is going to be one of uncertainty and indecisive fear, with lots of nail-biting,…[Read more]

The book you mentioned “Ranger’s Apprentice” (from what you said) sounded similar.

It is a book of thrilling suspense, vivid characters, and the deepest emotions you will find in all of fiction.

It is also my favorite fiction piece ever.

It is amaaaaaaaaaaaaazing. (I have problems with understatement)

@bluejay The Count of Monte Cristo.

… had to say that.

Glad to help. And the last paragraph, what’s really funny about it is that it is actually true (except maybe the black hole thing. I’d have to talk to some scientists).

That’s a good idea to have a female protagonist. That’s actually trendy you know. Bonus points. I’ve even thought about writing a pirate story with a female protagonist, not so…[Read more]

I would probably pace the floors of the palace in a small area back and forth at such a rate as would ware through the floors in a day or two in a completely zoned out deep concentration that excludes the rest of the world. Meanwhile my head would be spinning at a million miles per hour at how to capture this evil despicable wretch of a traitor…[Read more]

Yikes… that depends so much on the guy’s personality. The prince’s, I mean. If I was the prince I would probably faint… but I’m sure that’s not helpful. 😛

Can you sketch out his personality a little? I could tell you so much more that way.

Hi Tessa, glad you joined us.

I thought of this:

“Life is full of dangers, but the greatest danger of all is to hide from it.”

Ohhhhhhhhhh… somehow I missed that they were animals. *oops*
Sorry about that. 😛
Or… are they animals? Are Anna and her parents animals? Or are you just looking for a good line that will fit with both animals and humans?

If so…

Well, let’s see. Oh boy. Ummmm… *squinches eyes up meditatively* ‘Just because life is dangerous doesn’t mean…[Read more]

@rolena-hatfield I told her. She’s a quiet little thing of few words, but I could tell she was pleased. 😀

Hey Tessa Just! Australia— that’s so cool! 🙂 Welcome to the forum.

What about just ‘ Life is full of dangers, but that shouldn’t stop us from living it.”