Karina Sanchez

@Daeus I have homework to do right now, so I can’t. Will you still be writing this afternoon? I could maybe write then. 🙂

@spradlin Those are some great thoughts to chew on. 😉 I think that Orwell is telling the story for his readers, mostly. His main objective in writing this story seems to be to convince others of whatever points he’s trying to get across in his writing. It’s a little to early in the story to tell exactly what points he’s trying to prove. @Daeus…[Read more]

Quick call out everybody. I’m writing now if you want to join me.

@sarah-h Unfortunately, Wattpad isn’t the safest place in the world, but I think it can be used and enjoyed if done carefully. My two concerns are that a lot of the books on there look like junk and there doesn’t appear to be much to say what can’t go on a cover, or at least the website is just bad at filtering that stuff. The good news is that…[Read more]

@jadamae Good point. I definitely agree with you about that. 🙂

Interesting thoughts, everyone!
As far as writing goes, I noticed that there was a lot of telling in the beginning, too, but as you said @daeus, I don’t think that it was necessarily a bad technique. As a reader, I was engaged the entire time. And that’s really all that matters, right? 😉
The characters are great. Each animal has a strikingly…[Read more]

I think all the animals have some sort of symbolism. The raven for instance. And Boxer is another good one. He is a picture of such powerful industry that he can support the weight of communism, but eventually, it wears him out. (getting a little ahead of myself there)

@hannah-krynicki I think that’s a good guess, though if I hadn’t known Orwell’s own beliefs, I would have guessed it was against any form of socialist/communist government whatsoever. If you approach the book from a purely logical standpoint, I think you will find that it teaches the risk of attempting a communist society is greater than any…[Read more]

@hannah-krynicki Well, to be technical, he wasn’t against communism (in fact, even though he’s called a socialist, I think communist would be a better term for him). Socialism according to Marx is the necessary middle point in transitioning from capitalism to communism. Socialism is defined as all property being owned by the state and (at least in…[Read more]

True, Major didn’t substantiate all his points, but he did make some good ones (considering the fairy tale setting). I think this probably has something to do with Orwell’s hidden bias. I’m not sure how many people know this, but Orwell was actually a socialist. What he didn’t like was totalitarianism. How in the world he thought he could have one…[Read more]

@Hope Honestly, I like it. I don’t think it’s cheesy at all. Great idea, combining the word legionnaires and the word legend. 😉 I’d definitely go with it.

Yes Ingrid, I actually think you hit on one of the biggest points there. The personalities of the animals are so vibrant. Orwell doesn’t seem to miss a single opportunity to point out the personalities of a single animal. That should be a good lesson on the importance of character even above action.

@hannah-c Ah, I wondered about that. Sneaky you.

@hannah-c Are you on wattpad? What’s your username?

Good observations.

One of the first things I noticed was how much telling there is, but how it actually works out quite well. Orwell tells the story in classic fairy tale style but yet does so with a confidence that makes it seem real. I think this is because of the strong third person style where there is never a hint of Orwell sneaking in his…[Read more]

Street team? Oh, Book Mafia.
The Luxological Bunch
Lightning Team

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The Illuminati. Ha Ha Ha!

@his-instrument Don’t publish it online. Not for copyright reasons, but because you’ll get low-quality critiques. KP is not a good platform for long critique passages. Short ones will work, but long ones are simply way too time consuming to critique on this platform.

If you want a critique of your book, create a new thread and ask if anyone is…[Read more]

@his-instrument Don’t publish it online. Not for copyright reasons, but because you’ll get low-quality critiques. KP is not a good platform for long critique passages. Short ones will work, but long ones are simply way too time consuming to critique on this platform.

If you want a critique of your book, create a new thread and ask if anyone is…[Read more]

@his-instrument If this is a first draft, it is well done. There are a few grammatical errors and such, but not many. If I were doing a full blown edit, there are more things I would point out than I can here, but overall this story is fairly mature. One thing that confused me at first was why the narrating voice had such a modern laid back style…[Read more]