Esther

@esther-c

Are Ev and *temporarily forgets her name* Falon still going to the dance together?

Okay so I sort of.. completely re-did Falon, yet I didn’t, she still has a similar personality it’s just her back story and everything is kind of different

so I’d still love to have them go together… but if you don’t mind, could Ev just forget anything…[Read more]

@esther-c

he sounds….terrifying lol

@freedomwriter76

Riya

“Yeah, I do. Uh…do you want me to ask my friends if they want to come with us, or…?” Bucky asked.

“Oh yeah, forgot about that,” Riya said with a soft chuckle. “Sure!”

@freedom @esther-c

maybe they can come across Clint and Ami in the hall?

@trailblazer @esther-c @acancello @keilah-h @jonas @savannah_grace2009 @highscribeofaetherium @anyone I missed

I just got a cool short story idea but wanted to run it by all of you, what if I did a story starring who but Fennin?

The theme would be “you can’t do it all on your own” since, if you haven’t noticed, Fennin likes taking on a lot of…[Read more]

@everyone @highscribeofaetherium @rae @savannah_grace2009 @keilah-h @esther-c @acancello @trailblazer

Who is going to add a villain? (I know some of you have already said you aren’t, but I can’t remind who.) we kind of need to know before anyone RPs in this scene, since they’re all arriving at once.

@freedomwriter76

Cool! We’ll see what @esther-c wants to do!

awww, he’s so sweet with all of this. Hasn’t had experience and doesn’t know what to doo 💕

Riya

“I’m good with shopping if you want, but I-I don’t have much money…” Bucky replied, his cheeks holding a slight tint of red.

Riya smiled.

He was so sweet and kind.

“I don’t e…[Read more]

@trailblazer

@esther-c has a character in this scene too.

@freedomwriter76

AH sorry I haven’t rped yet!

(oh also, just a thought, but if Clint and @esther-c ‘s Amidala are going together they could all hang out?)

Riya

Bucky gave her a soft smile, “Yeah, I think they’re coming…I could call them. I don’t think most of them are going as pairs, more like a friend group, but y-yeah, they could come with u…[Read more]

@esther-c

Thanks for sharing!

(also, everyone shared such great advice for your questions earlier, I don’t have anything else to add!)

@esther-c

*points above*

@esther-c

Ooo!! I’ll have to check it out!!

@esther-c

That’s so cool! That would be fun!

@esther-c

Woah, I will check that out!

@esther-c

I’m glad I was able to help!

@esther-c

Hmm… the overcoming problems too easily really could be a problem. Something that I think would help is making the problems in general take up more space. A characters struggle should snowball as a result of their own bad choices, which reflect their major flaw they hope to overcome. The general problem should not come up quickly…[Read more]

@esther-c

Woops, sorry, that got posted to soon.

Anyways, as I was saying, I like it and you can tell Ami is good friends with Ev.

I don’t think you need an action opening, this introduces your characters nicely and captured me, which is what you want in a first chapter. From my gleaning of info on fist chapters, you want one, above all,…[Read more]

@esther-c

I like it. At some parts it made me laugh, and you definitely portrayed a healthy family (something I never say no to in books) and with the part about the donut and Ev…I was thinking how I would like my crush to do that! XD even though I’ve never had a donut before in my life, and am most likely allergic to it, I would eat it just…[Read more]

@esther-c

Ok! If you do wanna read the chapter, I posted it like two posts above this one.

Ooo, great!! I read it just now, and I don’t think it’s information-dumping at all!

Oh yeah, ok. That’s true. Sometimes I feel like there’s a lot of writers saying to have some kind of action in the first chapter, and others saying that you just need to sho…

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@esther-c

I read the chapter, and I think I see what you mean.

I wouldn’t say that your problem is the lack of action. I think the way you opened with the painting scene is a great introduction. It introduces Ami’s character, how she’s artistic, what she values, what kind of person she is. So it definitely doesn’t need more action. The way you…[Read more]

@esther-c

I don’t want to make a whole other topic for this, so I’m posting my question(s) here. XD

lol XD

It is hard to say much without knowing much of your book, but I do agree with what Sara said as far as openings…

I guess it depends on the reader, but personally, I like books that paint some of the picture in the first (and even seco…[Read more]