Ellie Wingfeather

@grcr

Ohh! I never thought of that before!!!

That makes a lot of sense, actually.

Maybe I could go something like this:

1. Prologue

2. Memory (chapter 15 of the second link, shows Sef and Neveah picking flowers with Hanna)

3. Nothing (go to Lilitu and Livia)

4. Stolen (where Sef and Neveah get seperated)

@hybridlore

I will definitely think about all this! I need to get more opinions before I make a decision…I am just so new to all this and want to see what more people think.

It’s a neat idea with the time change or whatever, I just don’t want it to be too confusing, and/or abrupt, you know?

@acancello

Awww your dedication and acknowledgement…

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@savannah_grace2009

Hey! I think the first one does a great job of pulling the reader in more, but the second one also has some great writing in it.

I know the chapter with Sef and her mom really means a lot to you, and it does a good job of setting up the backstory of Sef’s parents and a little bit of world building. So really they both work in…[Read more]

@acancello

I have skimmed through these pages here and read pieces of your WIP and I have to say… I love them! Your really good at describing the way things look and feel.

Wait…really???!?!?! Aww thanks that means so much to me!!! I am excited for your feedback!! AND I CAN’T WAIT FOR MORE HUGO!!! lol

Also, feel free to tag you in any post w…

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@jonas @thearcaneaxiom @highscribeofaetherium @rae @vinagirl @trailblazer @grcr @esther-c @whalekeeper @mineralizedwritings @keilah-h @acancello @hybridlore @anyone-else

Okay, guys. I need serious help. My novel is kind of going nowhere…because I don’t know which way to start it!!!

I have two beginnings for my story. One jumps straight into…[Read more]

@trailblazer

I really like this scene!!!

Some ideas for plot twists:

Maybe she apologizes to Albert or something?? And then realizes that she does like him? Or something happens with her and Chester? OR A NEW BOY MOVES TO TOWN!!

Sorry, all my ideas seem to be centered around romance….lol

@esther-c

Livia

She stood there for a moment. “Um…I’m not sure how to do this.”

“Yeah, me neither,” Lukas laughed a little, “I was kind of hoping you would know.”

“Well, I don’t.”

“Oh.”

“We should watch the other people, and maybe we’ll figure it out?” Liv raised an eyebrow, and Lukas nodded.

They studied Fynn and Callista for a good…[Read more]

@esther-c

Hey, my little sister’s name is Hallie!! XD

@freedomwriter76 @jonas @rae

Sef

She flinched back at the man’s voice.

It reminded her of too much….

No. She would not think about Iver now….

Cowering back into the shadows, she hoped he wouldn’t notice her. Or ask her any questions.

@savannah_grace2009 @rae

I’ll be praying for you guys! I’m sorry it’s been so rough.

@esther-c Hey! Sorry I meant to respond to this when I saw it, but I got distracted with other stuff xD.

The first ones probably my favorite. The second one feels a little abrupt… almost, if that makes sense. But I think they both work!

@mineralizedwritings @esther-c

Thanks guys, it really helps me to know that I can talk to you guys <333

@trailblazer

Sorry, I keep misspelling it….XD

@rae

If you want, I could add Sef if calyhuge’s character doesn’t fit him. Sef knows pain, she’s been abused and would probably relate to him. she too has skeletons in the closet that she doesn’t like to talk about…so yeah….

@trailblazer

I can’t wait for the next part! I don’t really have many ideas for plot events, but I’ll let you know if I think of any good ones! Yeah, probably reading other books like it would help.

@jonas

Also, note that the time bubbles were relevant to this RP.

That’s what they all say….

@traiblazer

WYOH!!! IT’S ALL YOUR FAULT!!! i think i just misspelled it though….lol

@highscribeofaetherium

Someone needs too keep an eye on those two…*looks suspiciously at Rae and Jonas*…things get crazy when they’re left unsupervised!!!

I read every page since page 11 because I had to know what the heck you guys were talking about lol