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I had to manually go in and change a lot of things because I wanted only parts of some of the pictures to be colored.
How did you do that? I must know!
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
(We can head back to school in the morning/whenever. Rory needs to be Leo’s assistant, right? Or are the two going their separate ways?)
Rory
Rory just lay there, listening to the steps. He felt himself go ridged out of instinct, but he didn’t run. Someone got down beside him and Rory closed his eyes, waiting for the inevitable. “Rory. Thank God, you’re here.”
Rory’s eyes opened and he held his breath.
A hand brushed Rory’s hair out of his boy’s face, and a slight shiver ran through Rory. He had never felt anything like that gentle movement. “Oh, Rory. Kid.” Leo murmured.
Rory didn’t want to look, because he was terrified it was a cruel dream. Slowly, he rolled over on his back and turned his head. Leo was kneeling beside him, a worried expression in his gentle eyes. Rory rolled away again. “Leo, why did you come? There’s nothing left. I’m tired of running and I’ve got nothing else to live for.”
(aaannnddd he hit rock bottom.)
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
Okay I’ll try to get one done tomorrow.
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
I don’t think Koshka and I thought anyone was going to follow us…. 😁
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
haha!
I heard that!
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
Reminds me of someone else. (Sabina)
huh. I hadn’t thought of that.
My first thought was a story about her brother, David.
ah, whoops. I can fix that.
This felt too quick. He’s gone from cold and only speaking when necessary to suddenly spilling out his entire backstory. Could you show him considering doing this before he does? Perhaps looking like he is about to talk a couple of times, only not to? (without lengthening what you already have. You could just throw this into one of your summaries. Or you could have Joseph telling his story first, trying to relate to the boy.)
To me he said it because they were both talking about Liam which made him think of his parents. However, if this feels to quick, I can do as you suggested.
The sentence ‘You can’t blame him’ feels out of place for Beric’s character. It feels more like he’s trying to get Joseph to sympathise with him than making demands like he does later in this paragraph. I might rephrase it to something more commanding, like ‘Don’t you even think of blaming him.’ I would also have him look Joseph in the eye with an accusing glare right at this moment.
Ah, thanks. I’ll fix that.
The expressions this guy has add a lot of character to him. One moment I feel like I should sympathize with him, and the next he feels like a psychopath.
Um…. thanks. (lolololol)
Honestly though, I’m glad it does. One minute you do want to sympathies, the next he seems like a wild animal. This is the feel I’m looking for, so I’m really glad that’s what you’re getting.
Beric is a well-done character. Not sure how he will add to the story in the long run, but I really got this sense of someone broken finding redemption. Good work!
Thank you!
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
Oh dear. trying not to think about how long I have to wait for the next chapter!!!!!
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
I saw that coming and really didn’t want to.
oh why are you so mean! Why are you such a terrible person. *sobbing* (like I have room to talk)
Oh man. He shouldn’t do it, of course! But man, this one is gonna hurt.
One thought.
I know if you choose to punish me instead, I will deserve whatever it is you do.”
He just asked for forgiveness, not mercy. They often go hand in hand, but they are not the same. To forgive doesn’t mean you take away the punishment.
Other then that……I don’t know if I want to say it was good because this is so bad. Poor Alan. But it was a……. hmmm……. a well done chapter.
Looking forward to the next and trying not to think about how long I’m gonna have to wait.
btw, this was playing while I was reading and it seems to fit, (though it’s too dramatic for a soundtrack to the imaginary movie scene, it does capture the feel.)
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
Thank you.
very relieved me goes and starts reading.
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
HAY!
Was that supposed to be a prank…………
This should be chapter 22…… (Chapter 30th being The Prison and Chapter 31st The Regretful,) but there is no Chapter 22nd!
Where did it go?
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
If you’re asking what do I think he should do right now (before I read the chapter), then i don’t know. There’s not much he can do, besides not cooperate.
Oh yay! We’ve hit the chapter that has the book name, This’ll be good.
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
@raxforge @linus-smallprint @keilah-h
I have a feeling y’all would get a kick out of this.
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
*gasp* Eddie wanted to dance with my boy!!!
*squeal of delight*
you may have just saved his life.
lolololol.
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
uh yeah poor Beric!
The kid had a rough go of it!
Glad you liked the scene
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
sounds good! I can’t wait!!!
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God