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hybridlore replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
~Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?
Probably either Leon or Julian. I’m going to say Leon for this book.
~ Were there any characters that need to be more engaging? If so, how would be some good ways for me to do that?
Umm . . . For some reason I’m thinking of Fox, since he was the…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
He ended up marrying the daughter of a farmer that he helped. Mercy grew up and married and had children, and so did most of the other children, though their fifth, Allan, died when he was fifteen.
🥺
Thank you!
Also, Linus had a point. We never found out who wrote that note (I know you just said it was an acolyte, but maybe…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
Okay, I’ll try to answer them after I eat breakfast.
Okay, I’m tempted to say something that’ll make y’all kill me.
Lemme guess. Questions for the overarching series or something like that?
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
Thank YOU for all the help. All of you have been so kind and helpful. Never could have rewritten this without help.
Your welcome! Let me know one you have the feedback questions ready please!
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
Oh wait, what if he’s describing the painting and he was like, “it was from one of the kingdoms that has knights, obviously not here,” or something like that.
Or does that not work.
Still seems kind of ‘as you know’ish.
Something along those lines. What if he says ‘it was a painting from [_____]. Flavia loved the knight in it an…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
I tried to send them to your emails. So for you, it’s the Proton one.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @theducktator @linus-smallprint
Okay, I’m sorry, that was a bit of a mess. I tried to send a Word document with the two new chapters in it because Ellette can’t do Google anymore. There are two (?) links I sent. The right one is the second one, without a message.
Hopefully this works.
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@ellette-giselle that’s perfect, thanks!!
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
Yes, I was going to say, I can probably switch them over to Word. I believe you can comment anonymously on there if you aren’t signed in. Just give me a couple minutes.
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@ellette-giselle ^I second this.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
Huh. I don’t know how I could fix that.
I could open a section of it specifically for comments, and y’all could write them out instead of linking them to a specific section of text, but I feel like that might be more annoying for other people. Maybe I can copy any major ones over for you.
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hybridlore replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
Pretty please, with a cherry on top, tell me what happens to Joseph and his family. 🙃
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
Nice.
@ducktator @keilah-h @ellette-giselle @linus-smallprint
New chapters are out. I wrote this week, so I feel like I have enough room to give you guys two.
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hybridlore replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
It might have just been something I thought, then. Not that I was saying it was totally unrealistic—I just know that last-minute conversions tend to be less … I don’t know.
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
I honestly have no idea on what my views on this whole election thing are. But I didn’t see Rowan’s conversion to be like, fake or forced or whatever.
The example of that criminal on the cross in the Bible, that happened, so I mean why can’t this one? Y’know?
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hybridlore replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
😢😢😢
Okay, I see where you’re coming from.
True, maybe… but maybe he’s done enough research to have found it already. I don’t know. I wanted to hear something about Joseph’s descendants, but it’s okay.
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The Ducktator replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
You should be able to get in. My brother’s classmate does not have a google account, and he and my brother were still able to work on a doc together.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
Either way, honestly. Whatever works.
I think it might still let you in, but I don’t know if you’ll be able to comment. I guess we’ll have to see. I’ll email you the link.
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hybridlore replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
Wow.
I gotta say, it’s probably not as much of a shock as some of the other deaths, since it really felt like you were leading up to this… but still.
Keilah has a good point. I do like how you made it more hopeful at the end, and the time jump is really interesting. It’s cool to know what happened afterward.
I’m glad Rowan b…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year ago
@ellette-giselle That makes sense.
I was surprised to find I liked it too!! It’s just a really satisfying end to this story somehow.
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