@ellette-giselle
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
@ellette-giselle @linus-smallprint
(if you were reading something like Fifty Shades of Grey or Twilight we would be having a totally different conversation)
OOOF NOOOOO NOT TWILIGHT
There was one good thing about it, and that was the fact that even my trashiest works look like masterpieces next to it. And they’re at least pretty much…[Read more]
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month ago
Eeeeeeepers. Yeah no. I’m with Helmer on hights; they’re tolerable, but I’ll die with my feet on the ground, thank you very much.
XD
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month ago
True, true. I think I can claim my paralysis gloves though (although that was inspired by some medical stuff).
(No? But I was cringing inside and wide-eyed)
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 month ago
Nope. I’ve already typed up 1,367 words for you. I’ve been slowly chipping away at this when I’ve had the chance.
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 month ago
I’m getting there. I finished rereading your story and will hopefully have my answers for you very soon. In fact, I don’t have any pressing School assignments at the moment and have written a lot for my own story this week, so I will be working on that right away.
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
I think murderer could work as long as he said Like murderer, or almost was a murderer. If you want him to say something that he is, he could think of himself as a monster or wild beast. Or, since he is trying to be the hero, an interesting flip would be to have him decide, “I’m not the hero, I’m the villain.” That would flow wi…
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month ago
Oh my. No, I’ve never seen that.
I stole the idea from my brother, who has also never seen that.
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RAE replied to the topic Let's Laugh! Writing Memes in the forum Art 1 month ago
XD
The one about reading as a reader and then reading as a writer is so relatable!
You can ask @raxforge , but I have a habit of criticizing every book I read for school from a writer’s perspective. My tutor is still trying to convince me that Robinson Crusoe isn’t really as bad as I said. Good luck convincing a part German to…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
also, I’m not sure if you’re referring to Alan or Rour, but I think neither of them went too far. They both are wrong about something and think they’re right, and as such it’s messing with their minds.
I was referring to Alan attempting to kill Rour.
WHAT! He didn’t go save Martha!!!!
Alan! Grrrrrr!
Alan’s beginning…[Read more]
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Kefa replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month ago
I have discovered a new favorite word!
superfluous!!!!!
I MUST tell everyone!
@beth-torres @loopylin @raxforge @theducktator @theshadow and anyone else!!!! -
Kefa replied to the topic Let's Laugh! Writing Memes in the forum Art 1 month ago
THANK THE LORD!
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HighScribe replied to the topic Let's Laugh! Writing Memes in the forum Art 1 month ago
The chefs would have no idea what to do with a real chicken.
By ‘chefs’ you mean teenagers who can barely put processed food in the microwave, right?
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Andrew McLaurin replied to the topic Let's Laugh! Writing Memes in the forum Art 1 month ago
That’ s because they don’t cook real chicken there.
LOLLL!!! I would like to argue against that but I have this feeling that you are right.
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RAE replied to the topic Let's Laugh! Writing Memes in the forum Art 1 month ago
THE ONE WITH THORIN AND KILI!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! XD
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month ago
Leo
“I know.” Footsteps in the distance clicked faintly in his ears. A buzzing radio signal flared nearby. The security team no doubt. Leo looked at Rory, eyes narrowing. “You ever climbed a brick wall?”
He took the Kid’s wide eyes as an answer. Leo leaning against a classroom door as he fished around for the master key. Two…[Read more]
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Esther replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month ago
Oooh, I like it!! I could definitely feel and experience what Jonathan was feeling and going through.
The only suggestion I would have would be to eliminate some of the passive voice (“The floor was sinking…” “…his brother was on his hands and knees…”). It will tighten up the prose and draw the reader in more.
But that’…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow
Who’s ready for the next scene?
Chapter the 22nd – The Murderer
I need to read Little House on the Prairie again.
The is one character in this chapter that I’m wondering if I’ve gone too far with him. Does it make sense why he does what he does in this chapter? (This…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 month ago
I’m holding on to hope that Eric will realize how serious what he did was and come to a true repentance. Though it almost seems to me, (especially after he did that) that he wasn’t ever a true believer but the Saviour was more of almost a”lucky charm” to him. Something to bring him happiness and keep him safe.
Time will tell for this.
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MineralizedWritings replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 month ago
Loved that snippet! I like how the reader is just as confused as Jonathan, I kinda felt like I was reading an anime lol.
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Kefa replied to the topic Let's Laugh! Writing Memes in the forum Art 1 month ago
Yeah I know you’re a girl… wait…..
i mean, the way I write i’m clearly a girl, and if you can’t tell that, look at my profile picture.
YOUR SAYING A WRITE AND MY PROFILE LOOKS LIKE A GIRL DID THAT?!
what meme are you talking about? I’m confused……..
The one with the two little white round characters… where he said “it…[Read more]
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