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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
@ellette-giselle This is why I said I wasn’t certain whether or not I agreed with you because of those situations. I feel like lying goes against what God wants us to do as Christians, but I’m not sure what I would do in those scenarios.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
I’m not exactly sure if I agree with you about God ever wanting Christians to lie, but I get that you’re voicing your own beliefs and I understand why you don’t want to change it. However, just be aware that it might be a slightly controversial topic.
Anyway, I love the plot twist. Great job with the details leading up to it…[Read more]
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Andrew replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
@rae @whalekeeper @loopylin @hybridelore @ellette-giselle @grcr
I’m sorry for not RPing, it’s been busy the past couple of days.
Ben Gunn, Flare – Group 1, Everstrand edge
The entire time of this happening, Ben and Flare began this following discourse:
“We must abandon them, they are causing too much noise, guards will be storming the place.”…[Read more]
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Enid replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
@jonas @loopylin @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @rae @grcr @raxforge
Marcel — Elderstrand (w/ Group 1)
The chunky creatures loomed over them, casting shadows over the soaked ground. They walked without sight or feeling, without head movement.
Someone cried out. It was the man with wind powers. He cradled his hand, and when the other young men…[Read more]
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Loopy replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
@ellette-giselle My character doesn’t even have military training. She’s just… very determined.
@grcr @raxforge @whalekeeper @jonas @raeFelicity— Group 1, Edge of Elderstrand
“Clickmen.” Felicity shuddered at the sound of metal footsteps. It was clear as they got closer that they were not the machines Felicity was used to, but she didn’t care…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
So, even though this doesn’t sound pleasant, what I ended up doing was reading the chapter through and then rewriting it completely, using the old chapter as a reference point for events that needed to happen and dialogue I wanted to keep.
That is what I’m doing as well, but either my new ideas are much better than my old or my q…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
I would be interested in your reasons behind why you don’t agree with her/my reasoning. Though keep in mind I won’t be changing this scene, so if you find it a waste of time then don’t bother explaining.
To put it simply, it is impossible for God to lie (Hebrews 6:18). Now of course, things are different for God, but Jesus, in Hi…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
This is one of the best ones yet!!
Huh. You often supprise me with the scenes that you think are the best.
I’m curious, did you write this from scratch, or was it in the draft?
In my first draft, I was unsure if I wanted to send Alan to save The Faithful after he joined them. Event happened differently there. Alan found out ab…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
I was a little distratded during this chapter because I do disagree with you on weather or not it is okay for Christians to lie to protect others. However, I don’t really have a response to the arguments that Sabina gives and I belive this to be a tercarary issue, so unless you want to discus this, I’m willing to leave it…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
@jonas YES!
@whalekeeper @ellette-giselle @grcr @raxforge @loopylin
Baron (Brutus)—Group 1, Elderstrand edge
Brutus sighed, before coughing once more. After which, he harnessed the wind once again, throwing the strong wind at the foremost figure, trying to knock it over. But nothing appeared to happen to the things. Brutus gave a cry,…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
Troy was a big hint. I also some some other things from it that poped up in my feed that contained some greek mythology gods/creatures, so I thought that might be the case
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
@ellette-giselle @stephie @keilah-h @theducktator @loopylin @theshadow
Next chapter! This scene was a little fun to write as it uses a new location that did not exist within my first draft.
The last bit of character I want Alan to develop may now be more apparent, Keliah.
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy Book I: The Cost in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
Is the musical based off of the Iliad or Odessy?
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Cloaked Mystery replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
I mean, they’re technically just NPCs, so yes, (though I would recommend using them sparingly.) In this case, I happen to agree with @rae‘s assessment and will be deploying them anyway, lol.
@whalekeeper @rae @raxforge @loopylin @hybridlore @grcr @ellette-giselle
Ellis — Elderstrand (Group 1)
Within a few seconds, the fight was…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
@jonas @loopylin @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @whalekeeper @grcr @raxforge
Baron (Brutus)—Group 1, Elderstrand edge
Brutus held his drenched scarf up over his nose, his eyes shifting to the boy. He didn’t speak, he merely looked the boy up and down, before breaking out into a few coughs. Recovering himself, Brutus walked over the form of the…[Read more]
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Enid replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
@jonas @loopylin @hybridlore @ellette-giselle @rae @grcr @raxforge
We do need a plan, do we want to get out of the city?
Marcel — Elderstrand (w/ Group 1)
Marcel cocked his head, amused, and shook his fists to loosen them back to normal. “You could have left us a couple soldiers…”
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Enid replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 1 year, 10 months ago
The BBC series XD
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy Adventure RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 10 months ago
@whalekeeper @ellette-giselle @loopylin @jonas @grcr @hybridlore @raxforge
Baron (Brutus)—with Ben Gunn, Flare, Leon, Julian, Fel, Ellis Sara, Marcellus, and the other Marcellus, our favorite neighborhood godling, Elderstrand Edge (I had fun typing that all out XD)
“You guys should make a quick plan!”
The wind around Brutus rose in int…[Read more]
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Enid replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 1 year, 10 months ago
I’m so glad you’ve been drawing and coloring so much! 🤣 It’s been a couple years and we can finally see your own imaginings of your characters.
Ooh he looks like Mr. Darcy. I’m watching Pride & Prejudice right now, lol.
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 10 months ago
But is that bad? Can Joseph not love the same thing as Aaron and still be Joseph? If you think it is bad, then……. idk what I’ll do. lol
No, it’s not bad. You just told me to keep a watch for if Joseph starts to feel like Aaron. This is just a place where the two of them could start to feel sort of samey.
Let’s just say that if…
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