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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic TNPT: The Sword – Outlining in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 1 year, 4 months ago
@ellette-giselle @whalekeeper @theducktator (your late, but fine, I will let you join. Last one.)
Here is the link to what I have done on my outline so far. I’ve just written down everything I am confident with at the beginning. I will add my ideas for the middle part and what I know of the ending later (Maybe tomorrow. I should have time…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 4 months ago
Does this mean we won’t get a new section today? 🥺
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Koshka replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 4 months ago
I am really enjoying the world building. Keep it up!
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Koshka replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 4 months ago
Oops, sorry. I was waiting for class to start and in a hurry, so I wasn’t thinking through my writing.
What I meant was, do your characters need to make the right choice? Or should they mess up a couple times, possibly showing that God can work through even our mistakes, and working on character flaws. Although, you did already…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic Let's Laugh! Writing Memes in the forum Art 1 year, 4 months ago
@theducktator @ellette-giselle
If we are going to compare a Narnia character to Eric, I think Eustace is a better fit. He and Eric are both kind of wimpy. And Eustace becomes a dragon.
Though I understand why you would grab Edmund, since Edmund betrays his family.
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 4 months ago
They’re names are German! This is where you start to feel some of the German cross– beyond the complection. (Leon and Julian are also German names. Julian being the German version of Julius, which is very Roman. Little glimpse into the world of naming which is an obsession of mine.)
Ah. That’s a good idea.
Thank you for the pro…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 4 months ago
I can see the dilemma. I think it is good that Leon and Julian are trying a more subtle approach. I think @hybridlore‘s suggestion is good. They wouldn’t have to lie then.
But they are going to have to come out with the truth eventually.
Leon and Julian might not necessarily take the correct option first as well. It might be…[Read more]
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Koshka replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 4 months ago
Hmm.
Could you use this to portray a character flaw? Idk exactly what you have in mine for flaws though.
Hmmmmm…
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 4 months ago
In this chapter, you did a better job of showing Leon and Julian are in a place they used to call home. And I’m not just referring to their comments upon seeing the village in the valley. Their interactions with the Klein family, falling right into the traditions, showed this even better than their words.
I like the feel of the…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 4 months ago
I think it’s fine. They have to, in this instance, instead of just jumping at it when they don’t need to. Since Elishavet was the one who pointed that out, I would wait to see what she thinks, but I think that it’s fine.
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 4 months ago
Yes?
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 4 months ago
What section? Kingdom Pen, why didn’t you tell me about this? *Goes back to read*
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic Let's Laugh! Writing Memes in the forum Art 1 year, 4 months ago
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whaley replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 1 year, 4 months ago
Okaaaaay, after I give them some decent shading. But only then. *Glares at your blackmail and poofs away*
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whaley replied to the topic ⚔️Fantasy WIP⚔️ in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 4 months ago
It’s very funny…. but as I work through my WWII set, I’ve just had an amazing idea for a fantasy. I wonder it WWII triggers fantasy ideas…….. lolololol.
*Meanwhile I sit here with a WWII era inspired fantasy, watching you talk* 😁
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whaley replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 1 year, 4 months ago
*Reconsiders*
NO. NO, I’LL NEVER GIVE IN! I’M TOO INSECURE , YOU CAN’T MAKE ME! *Struggles against my bonds*
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freedom started the topic ⚔️Fantasy WIP⚔️ in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 4 months ago
@rae @savannah_grace2009 @godlyfantasy12 @kyronthearcanin @lightoverdarkness6 @mineralizedwritings @loopylin @theloonyone @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @queen_of_alvastia @gwyndalf-the-wise @thearcaneaxiom @princesachronicle22 @esther-c @keilah-h @ellette-giselle @theducktator @smiley @highscribeofaetherium @grcr @trailblazer @acancello @godlyfantasy12…[Read more]
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freedom posted a new activity comment 1 year, 4 months ago
@ellette-giselle I am so, soooo glad you enjoyed Broken Shackles! 💜💜
Thank you so much for your support.I’ve noted what you said and I can see where things got repetitive (something I’m still trying to work on😅). As far as Riker thinking his sins are greater, it honestly really depends. I based that part of his struggles based on my own battle…[Read more]
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-GRCR- replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 1 year, 4 months ago
EEEEEEEE Thank youuu! It’s quite funny to me that it’s what it reminded you of because three of them are actually training to be warriors lolol. Maybe I’ll run with that…
Oh, looks like Whaley agrees with me!! XD
Lolol 😄
I guess I’ll have to just start one something then…
*quite excited and motivated to draw a comic*
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 4 months ago
XD
Leo
He bit back a grin. “Like they always say, it’s not save to jump out of a moving vehicle.”
The lorry door whooshed open. Silvia led the group aboard, waving their bus card under a the scanner. Leo helped Rory up the steps as inconspicuously as possible. The lorry was mostly empty this early in the morning. Their few…[Read more]
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Oh I have enjoyed it! It was excellent!
I’m really, really looking forward to the last book! (I love endings, so I’m thinking it might be my fav!)
Anyhow, I hope that any criticism was helpful. Thank you again so much for writing these! You’re doing an amazing job and these books have been very inspiring!