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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
It’s the gang, y’all. The same gang from last book. The same gang we left at the end of the last book and are now picking up and the beginning of the next.
Do I really gotta remind the reader?Yes, because some of us are too stoopid to remember. Also, I thought some of them might have gone separate ways, which can often happen in…[Read more]
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freedom replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
@ellette-giselle hehe, ok then🤭
(not a finished scene btw, but a snippet)
The Schind family looked exhausted, barely awake.
Not that Leon doubted that he probably looked much the same.
Thoughts of Germany had reawakened thoughts, memories, and even nightmares that plagued his sleep and sometimes even his waking moments.
He shifted on the…
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freedom replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
@ellette-giselle hehe thank youuuu🤭
and no, this is actually a section from The Bois’ book🫶😂
(and I’ll fix those typos, this was completely unedited, so😂)
tho I could share a snippet from Book 3 if you wanted👀
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freedom replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
@ellette-giselle @rae @savannah_grace2009 @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @koshka @godlyfantasy12 @anyone-else-idk
I love them y’all😭🫶
So much had crumbled.
So many lives had been lost.
Leo sank against the wall, fists clenching and unclenching, every breath heavy, tears blurring his vision.
Dietrich…Fin…so many lives had been lost.
And Eze…
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freedom replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
@ellette-giselle haha I’m glad you like my commentary😂
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freedom replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
@ellette-giselle You can tag me, sure! But I can’t make any promises on me reading all of the sections😅🫶
and that feeling definitely came across in the scene
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freedom replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
@ellette-giselle I only read the section you shared today, I picked quite the section to read😭💀
Any thoughts on this section in particular?
Other than I think it shattered me??? 😭
it’s really good, I love the strength they all have for their faith and their determination to stand no matter the cost.
I think it’s sad enough and portrays…[Read more]
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freedom replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
I haven’t been keeping up with all of this, but MA’AM.
way to tear me into pieces on a random Friday morning😭😭
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Ruth replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Thanks
Chase
Chase didn’t know what to think of the chaotic sight, so he stared with blank, black eyes, face half cast in shadow by his hoodie. “Why T-teach-er in t-tree?” A single flicker of purple came to Chase’s eyes, then died again.
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
@ellette-giselle oooh! I loved the bookbinding part!
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy – Book II: The Sword in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
@whalekeeper @stephie @theducktator @ellette-giselle @keilah-h
Chapter 21 out! Not too happy with this one. I’ve discovered I don’t like to write fight scenes.
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Sorry I’m late. I spent a long time yesterday finishing up a final assignment. But I’m done school for at least a year now!
It was a bittersweet parting the next day, and Leon and Julian found it more difficult to leave Landstraten now than when they had left on their way to the capital.
Who all is with them right now? You have…[Read more]
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
XD
Probably.
Leo
The kid was…off. Leo watched him shift his back to a wall and glance behind them. Nervous. Strange.
He settled a hand on his shoulder. The kid stuffed a start. Very nervous. Leo swiped his key card over a electronic doorknob and pulled Rory into an employee exit hall after him.
It was quiet in here, the…[Read more]
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Leo
Where he doesn’t have to kill anyone. Leo smiled half because of that interesting qualification, and half despite it. Rory seemed to be catching his balance again. Leo eased his grip on his arm.
“Sounds good to me.”
He held the door for Rory, then fell in step with him. They were going back to the church, the scene of the…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
@ellette-giselle thanks, got it!
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
@ellette-giselle sure, thanks!!
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 2 months ago
Leo
Not sure what…Leo looked up.
“A dream proffession? It’s what you wish or dream you could do for a job, since you don’t have to be a soldier now.” He straightened one of the pencils and tightened the wrap. “For instance, Silvia wants to be a research doctor someday.”
He tucked the end of the ace wrap back under itself,…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
Good section! I like it.
It was a little unclear that the other three men were joining Leon and Julian until now, unless they were in the first scene and I’m completely blaming. I just don’t think we got to hear that they were back yet.
My guess is that since no one has seen the prince’s face, they will replace him with his c…
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Color of Hope in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @theducktator @linus-smallprint
Next two chapters!
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Final book in the The Flames of Hope Saga: The Dawn Will Come in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 2 months ago
@ellette-giselle awesome first section!!
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