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hybridlore replied to the topic Mission Impossible– Two books out by 12/14/2025 in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
Hah, yes!
Sure! By the way, I liked the moodboards you already posted. Amber’s was really pretty. *is now remembering that name, and wonders when she is coming into the story*
I see similarities between Joseph’s story and this one. It feels like we’re going to time jump (also, you said that this story is about a young man……[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic Mission Impossible– Two books out by 12/14/2025 in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
KP just ate my post and went really weird…
I like Jim a lot.
I knew his parents were going to die once they hid Jonathan, but before that, no.
Does the story time jump after this, or does the whole book happen when Jonathan is nine?
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hybridlore replied to the topic Mission Impossible– Two books out by 12/14/2025 in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
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whaley the great and terrible replied to the topic Mission Impossible– Two books out by 12/14/2025 in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
Which plot twist? The one about Jonas’s dad?
Yep
It’s based off the book Fahrenheit 451 which I really want to read, but I haven’t yet, so I don’t know if it’s clean.
I read most of it at a getaway house by the ocean (one of my favorite recent memories), and it was a fun read. I didn’t finish it but at the time I ha…[Read more]
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hybridlore replied to the topic Mission Impossible– Two books out by 12/14/2025 in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
I was not expecting it at all!! 😂🥺
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hybridlore replied to the topic Mission Impossible– Two books out by 12/14/2025 in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
Ahem. Sorry. I meant to say, I don’t know if the glitch is on my side or yours. Probably mine.
and yeah, I could access the chapters, it just took a sec to reload so maybe that’s what I needed to do yesterday.
Now… 314???????!
And Jonathan!!!!
nothing to note in these really. I enjoyed them.
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-GRCR- replied to the topic Mission Impossible– Two books out by 12/14/2025 in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
Yeah, I literally felt a tear at the goodbye scene. And I don’t usually cry reading things (at least, not fiction).
Can’t wait for the next chapters…!!
It would. I don’t know. I’d have to ponder for a while. no promises. I’ve already got me hands full atm… but the temptation is great.
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hybridlore replied to the topic Mission Impossible– Two books out by 12/14/2025 in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
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hybridlore replied to the topic Mission Impossible– Two books out by 12/14/2025 in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
I was going to, but it wouldn’t let me sign in with my alt account and I didn’t want my main on there for all to see.
I don’t think I’ve heard of Equilibrium—is that a movie or a book?
Which plot twist? The one about Jonas’s dad?
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-GRCR- replied to the topic Mission Impossible– Two books out by 12/14/2025 in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
It’s so sad… I love 314 so much.
Also. random thought. this would make such a great manga/comic.
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hybridlore replied to the topic Mission Impossible– Two books out by 12/14/2025 in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
It was right around when Sara burst out at Jonathan.
I don’t know… I like Don. 😅 And Jonathan.
also, have you read the Giver? This book reminds me a lot of that so far.
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hybridlore replied to the topic Mission Impossible– Two books out by 12/14/2025 in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
It worked!
I liked these chapters. You did a great job of increasing the tension. I did notice that you briefly switched into Sara’s POV during the first chapter, then went back to Jonathan. I would fix that.
Great job!
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hybridlore replied to the topic Mission Impossible– Two books out by 12/14/2025 in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
They’re not showing up on the link for me.
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy – Book II: The Sword in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
@ellette-giselle @stephie @whalekeeper @keilah-h @theducktator
Chapter the 34th out!
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whaley the great and terrible replied to the topic Last of The Righteous in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
Wait what? You mean you don’t use spell check for the other book and still manage to have something readable?!
I didn’t know other writers couldn’t spell until I joined KP. XD I’ve rarely needed spell check. But my handwriting is horrible, and people can’t read it, so the skills balance out.
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic Last of The Righteous in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
*laughing very hard* *stops* Wait what? You mean you don’t use spell check for the other book and still manage to have something readable?!
If I did that…… *shudders*
Lucky boy. I can’t believe your brain lets you do that.
Um… yes. I’m following the rule of first drafts to ignore grammar and turn off spell check. I guess I…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic Last of The Righteous in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
Hey! Scythe! My dad and brothers LOVE that game. Funny thing is, I can’t stand it, but I’m the one that got them into it by buying it for them. 😂 Weirdly enough, I was picturing this kingdom like the scythe art, so that’s super funny.
It is a neat world, and the artwork is very good (though I wouldn’t recommend looking the artis…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy – Book II: The Sword in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy – Book II: The Sword in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic An Adventure Story in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 1 month ago
I’m fine, and they’re fine. Was pretty shaken up, but also weirdly cool.
Okay. Glad to hear that!
Gave me some insight into writing adrenaline charged characters.
Of course you would come out of an accident and say this!
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