Ellette Giselle

@ellette-giselle

I figured you probably knew, but just wanted go make sure. Because otherwise I would start rambling about stuff without defining things, like I normally do. XD

Yeah, I either lump it into personality or give it a category

@ellette-giselle

That’s true, the rewrite was.

The one paragraph where you said something along the lines of, make the enemy rejoice when you’re out of the fight, seemed taken straight from that quote (C.S. Lewis?) I could see modern believers saying something like that, but I don’t think it would be a well-known phrase in this world. Maybe p…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Yay!!! A happy part this time!! 🥲

@ellette-giselle

Okay! Here’s my story! I hope it fits under the prompt!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1KRKHdtUymxACwVnKGswOJq6yXCThk_mA4qnmq0SLmYo/edit?tab=t.0

@ellette-giselle

Not exactly sure what you mean by that……..

Psychology is the study of the human mind and its functions, especially those affecting behavior in a given context. (I just pulled that off Oxford Languages. XD)

I like to add psychological stuff to my character charts. It can tell me why the character wants what he wants.

For exa…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I have not. Thanks for reminding me about it, lol.

@ellette-giselle

“Geed,” Joseph replied. “How are Asher and Eric?”

Good?

Joseph lifted his head and looked at Sabina. “Thank you for telling me.”

Now the question is, how well is Joseph going to remember this conversation?

Looks good!

@ellette-giselle

Nope! You just told me I could only put a few of them in my signature, plus the 100 character limit, and that was when I was trying to convince you to save Eric. I can try to fit them all in, or I’ll just write “all of Ellette’s charries” if that’s what you prefer. 🤗😉

@ellette-giselle Looks good!

@ellette-giselle

Thank ye!

@ellette-giselle

Please be honest as y’all read this, because saving the boys is going to be a HUGE change. However, I think it may be the right one, and some interesting things happened that makes me think so. However, I am still on the edge, and I want to know in your honest opinion which direction seems best to take. (of course we all love A…

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@ellette-giselle

I was wondering if that was the inspiration. Rhoda is one of my favorite Bible characters. XD

@ellette-giselle

Hmm.

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I like it. 😄 I’m still suspicious about all this new governor has in mind, which is good in a literary sense. The events make sense even as they toss the next bit into suspense. This version is less intense than the previous one, but I liked having a period of quiet worry about what would happen suddenly change to…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Makes sense. I guess it would be a little awkward if that wasn’t the case 😅

@hybridlore

I was kind of shipping you guys in my head already

You’re not the first, lol

@ellette-giselle

It was pretty obvious. lol.

Do you mean the ship or something else? And if you mean the ship, I don’t know if I should take offence of that or not, lol, jk

Also, if anyone thinks that I am adorable because I am small and chubby, they are…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Hey, he can’t hear me. 🤭

Okay, cool. Looking forward to the next section!

@ellette-giselle

Gotcha. Yeah, no problem. He did faint, so there obviously was enough blood lost for that. You’re good! So, does this mean you’ll have to rewrite a lot of what you already have, or not much since you’re about to have Joseph leave?

@ellette-giselle

Overall, it was pretty good. Some of the dialogue towards the end felt a tiny bit clunky, though.

Very well,”” Eric sighed. “I shall bare the displays of emotion for tonight, but by tomorrow hugs will be limited to once a month.”

This is funny, but it sounds old-fashioned all of a sudden. Is Eric just teasing? Does he lapse i…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

1. It gives the reader more hope in a happy ending.

2. It’s more interesting because you play on the past events of the book to make readers think Asher and Eric will die, but then defy the stereotype, keeping them on their toes.

3. It saves Asher and Eric. 🤗

@ellette-giselle

YES! Much better. Thanks so so much!