Ellette Giselle

@linus-smallprint

This is a realistic reaction from Aaron. He sees himself as a failure and has suddenly had more responsibility shoved on to him than he thought he would get. He does not feel ready and hides, lest he bring down others with him.

Yes! And, (spoiler kinda) he’s unintentionally beginning to see himself as Ardenta’s savior which is…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

but she will refuse to read anything I write until I improve my grammar.

Do I know what that’s like or what! lol.

I can’t say to much about this at the moment, but for now, know that this is nec for the story.

Ok…… I trust you.

Maybe.

@keilah-h @theshadow @whalekeeper

k, here’s a new part.

@calyhuge @otherworldlyhistorian @thearcaneaxiom @linus-smallprint

Apologies for tagging y’all. Hope you don’t mind. I’ve started employing the advice y’all gave me, and I wanted to see what you fella’s think before I go any farther with it. Does Aaron still seem like a guy. I mean, would…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

This was great!!!

Suspicion: Alan’s father can control himself because he’s actually one of the Faithful. (Just a thought.)

Oh dear…… man…… I don’t know what to say. I mean, the grammar in there…… well some of it’s a little painful. lolol. I think I’m dso sensitive because I am bad at grammar so I’m always…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Ah, good. I was just about to start breathing down your neck on this. haha.

@thearcaneaxiom

This is great! You gave me a good picture here! That scene with Simon on the water and Eden in the water were my absolute favorite!! OH MY GOODNESS! They were amazing! With all the help I have gotten here and on my WIP I must say that if Aaron does not turn out there perfect character it’s because can’t write. lol.

Thank you…[Read more]

@calyhuge @otherworldlyhistorian

Oh wow, this is so helpful! Thanks so much!

(I’m curious what scene y’all read. The full battle scene, or the aftermath one? Or both?)

I will tell you it feels like it’s a real guy, and it feels like real war, and I think what you had him do so far is what a guy would do

That’s a relief! Just getting you to s…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

ok, his hair length. It’s not going to be like Aragorn because Friedrich has lived in the palace his whole life. His a strong guy though, and kinda doesn’t like all the fancy stuff. (His servants have quite a time forcing him into royal uniform. lol. His hair would be neatly cut, and a little on the shorter side, (about chin…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

But Turin and Edwin died.

I’m just telling the story.

lol.

We’re a good two-thirds (?) through.

I’m not gonna change what happened to them. That would change the whole story!

I’ll look back and try to add some fun scenes with Turin and Aaron…. if I can find an appropriate place.

Glad he’s reacting well.

I like how all his…

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@whalekeeper @loopylin @highscribeofaetherium @thearcaneaxiom @theloonyone @stephie @theshadow @theducktator @keilah-h @grcr @hybridlore @calyhuge @koshka @freed_and_redeemed @lightoverdarkness6 @esther-c @folith-feolin @otherworldlyhistorian

Awesome! This is perfect.

Ok, I have one. This will be mostly for guys, but if any girl’s have ideas…[Read more]

@rae @theshadow @highscribeofaetherium @linus-smallprint @grcr @mineralizedwritings @keilah-h

btw, how does August 21 sound as a due-date. It’s two weeks from today.

@rae @theshadow @highscribeofaetherium @linus-smallprint @grcr @mineralizedwritings @keilah-h

K…….. after a long deliberation….. I think I have decided. I don’t really have any exciting fantasy characters, cause fantasy’s not my thing. I just have boring old normal people. lol. So, my character is:

Prince Friedrich!

He is the lead in…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Awesome! Thanks you! Glad this is coming off realistic.

@whalekeeper

Can I get some of those Ten guy’s tags from ya? 😀

@rae @theshadow @highscribeofaetherium @linus-smallprint @grcr @mineralizedwritings @keilah-h

Y’all ready for a character?

@linus-smallprint

AWESOME!

And that is why answering this question is hard.

No kidding!

@keilah-h @theshadow @whalekeeper

Ok, I have the next section, but before I go on I would like some feedback on the beginning stages of Aaron’s reaction to his grief.

That night, men and boys slowly trickled back to the large building. The Imperial…

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@whalekeeper

None of that makes sense! haha! I can’t understand how you do that. I guess there are some blurred lines here and there. lol

@linus-smallprint

This makes no sense to me.

What?!?! *Face-palm. takes deep breath and looks at you. puts on very patient voice* How is this not extremely logical and the ONLY right way of thinking!

lololol.

That was on my mind as I was typing up my response.

Haha! I love that video. (And I may or may not go red every time I see it.)

I…

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@linus-smallprint

I would expect Turin to start punching things, but not Aaron.

Exactly. That’s what I was thinking too!

I hear when girls are upset, you want to just simply talk about it and how you feel. When I rant about my problems, I am not looking for someone to sympathize with me (even if I think I am). I am looking for a solution.…

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@linus-smallprint

First off, you guys are like alien creatures. None of these things you listed would be NEAR my response!! I would cry and want to talk to people and be held, and probably bury myself in writing or books if I was responding badly. haha!! I think it’s so funny how differently we think and react.

Yeah, that sounds like a good…[Read more]