Ellette Giselle

@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @grcr

The next morning, Julian and Leon left to start another journey. They wouldn’t be returning to the capital, so Joseph sent no return letter to Sabina.

Joseph walked with the two former soldiers outside the gates of the town. It was good to be with old friends.…

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@koshka

(lol. I have no idea where we’re going and so I didn’t know what else to RP. We can lose him as soon as you like.)

Rory

On Zero Rory, Leo, and Silvia all hesitated a step, throwing the rhythm off just barely. For a flash of a second Rory heard two steps. Then, the sound was gone, masked once more in the rhythm of their own…[Read more]

@koshka   @whalekeeper

Honestly, That’s what I was about to write, (except I didn’t think of the sack part, I just thought of dragging a heavy object.)

But yeah, that’s what I would do.

@elishavet-pidyon

Thank you!!! I really love his character!

@freed_and_redeemed

Leon and Riker!!!!!!!!

(You see, this is why I snowball you!)

Oh it was so good.

WAIT! Where’s the deaf boy?!?! I’m sure Riker has a deaf kid! Where did he go? Why didn’t Riker say hi to him? *goes into panic attack* don’t you dare tell me he’s dead! Say…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

(5 more minutes, and then we stop!)

SUCH A GOOD MOVIE!

Of course there’s the whole storks delver babies theory which isn’t true, (but I don’t know any people who still believe that)

but there are so many subtle things that are so, so good!

And the humor is chef’s kiss!

Okay, glad the scene works.…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

I love the map!!!

Okay, have fund being a terrible person and making all your readers mad at you.

lol.

It is super frustrating tho. HE WAS ON THE RIGHT TRACK!!

*sobs*

@linus-smallprint

lol. Poor Joseph. It must have been awful for him.

ah yes. Eric is very proud of himself.
good. Good! I’m so glad this scene works well! “touch down Tulip!!” (Storks if you haven’t scene the movie that quite come from)
 

I’m surprised there was no comment on the Julian/Joseph conversation.
was it good? Does it fit?

@linus-smallprint

that’s what (frustratingly) keeps me from being able to say this scene doesn’t work.

I don’t like you at all.

yes! Yes it does make sense, and I hate that I’m saying it, but it fits.

I doubly don’t like you.

I also agree that the interactions seem very stiff or formal, but I wasn’t sure if that’s what you’re going for.

@koshka

Rory

“How’re you holding up”

Rory glanced over at Leo. “I’m okay.”

Leo nodded and continued on.
Rory glanced back at the school. He felt a crawling sensation along his spine. As if… as if someone was watching them.
Rory evened his pace so it would match Leo’s steps. He came alongside the older boy. “I think someone’s followi…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Thank you!

Cute scene between Joseph and Julian? Hmm, not exactly the word I would have gone for…… lol. I think I get what you mean tho.

Ah. I use the name Jesus a lot in my writing. It’s a name with power.

@the_lost-journal

You’re not kicked. You just haven’t RPd so most people guessed you dropped out.

Plus, the boat crew, (which I think you’re characters are with) has done nothing for quiet some time because we’re trying to connect the other groups to them in order to have a little conference and figure out what on earth is…[Read more]

@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @grcr

Okay, I made the suggested changes to the last couple of sections, and I’m working on some more Joseph/Amelia interactions. I thought I’d just go ahead and post the next scene while I take care of the other stuff.

NEXT SECTION

After Leon and Julian left…

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@koshka

Quincy was flopped on his back wriggling under a bush. Leo extracted him, taking a moment to brush him off before slinging him over his shoulder.

Best mental picture ever! XD

Rory

Rory looked up at Leo. “Go where? where can we go?” Panic was rising in his chest, but he swallowed it down. He took Leo’s hand and let the young man…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Oh my goodness!

He’s so cool In almost a…. hmmm….. not quite creepy….. maybe, in a shivery way. lol.

He’s very cool and very eye catching. Quite the interesting picture! I like it!

@rae

I know that was rash of Baron, but he’s a soloest so he doesn’t understand teamwork

See, this is what Leon was thinking when he was worried about Baron joining their team.

@liberty

I’m so glad you like it.

Yes, Marta was alright. lol.

@hybridlore

Oh that looks so good!

I’m glad you found something you can use.

@raxforge

No problem. I just thought it was funny. You should see the grammar mistakes in my stuff.

@freed_and_redeemed

Oh that’s so sad.

Poor Hans.

Poor boys all of them.

@raxforge

There’s still a grammar mistake! 😆

It’s “Lord Quakers!” Rax walked towards the gloomy