Ellette Giselle

@linus-smallprint

😭😢

It’s okay…. I understand.

@hybridlore

Awesome!! I’m so glad you liked it!!!

Yeah….. Rolf had a rough time of it, but he got out sooner, whereas Leon was in the bad situation longer… things just didn’t escalate so high.

btw, was it you who asked about him changing his name? Well, if it was, you now have an answer!

@hybridlore  @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty

NEXT SECTION!!!

Interesting POV switch. A new technique I tried out for telling long stories rather then having a ton of first-person dialogue. Let me know what y’all think.

The sixteenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
September 9th
The Empire<…

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@theshadow

Oooo!! I like this!! This is getting good!

And, what if, what if we don’t make it?

This is a little cluncky because of the punctuation. If you did: “And what if–– what if we don’t make it?” or “And what if. . . what if we don’t make it?” either of those would work well. Use the dash if you want it to read as a sudden horrif…[Read more]

@keilah-h

@hybridlore

Thanks you two.

As for online, I don’t trust it. I’ve heard and seen too many online things get hacked for my liking. 😅

Thanks for the suggestion though!

@freed_and_redeemed

Great job!!!! I really liked it! I sure was nervous for them!

Poor Riker. I am really excited to see Erich show up!! He was a character I really liked from the last book. I’m really happy to see him again. I hope he gets a lot of “screen time”. 😂

I am wondering why Leon and Riker seem to be struggling with the lessons we…[Read more]

@keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon    @hybridlore     @linus-smallprint

So, in answer to all the questions:

the laptop did an un-authorized update. So while I hit save on all my documents, I still had them minimized instead of fully closed. Normally it tells me about the update and offers a time. I then shut everything fully down, make sure it’s…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Umm… Perehapes he was a slave, or at least treated like one, earlier in his life, along with his brothers and cousins. They escaped, and tired to help other slaves.

🤨

I wrote like two paragraphs of his backstory.

This is Omar we’re talking about.

Have you read the section where he introduces himself to Leon??

Okay l…[Read more]

@hybridlore  @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty

my loyal subjects, I beg pardon.

Tragedy has struck.

The dragon laptop ate LOS for breakfast! 😱

I was able to recover most of it, but alas I must be away to other duties.

No new sections until Monday. 😭

🐲

@linus-smallprint

Oh my word.

😂

@koshka

he was just messed up. Period.

Thankfully, he’s less messed up now.

He’s a very purpose driven person. Take away his purpose, and he’s got nothing left.

@koshka

Wow!! You did catch it!

That’s impressive.

that would be about the time. He had this almost horrifying relief that he hadn’t been killed, he didn’t know what on earth to do with Leon’s sacrifice and felt bound to help him in some sort of payment, but once Leon was on the road to recovery there was nothing left for him.

@koshka

No prob!!

Rory

Rory watched in stunned silence as the woman raced about, Leo trailing her and trying to catch things she knocked over in her haste. She was rattling on about something, but Rory was having a hard time tracking. It wasn’t that he was unable to take in her words… he most certainly was, along with every object and…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Haha, well, you and everyone else. (except Linus. He says he saw it coming, and I’m wondering if he caught on to something, or has read enough of my stuff that he guessed it was something I would do. 😂)

 

Is Leon going to heal now that this new slave master is kinder to them and won’t make him work as hard as he did?

🤷🏼‍♀️

There i…[Read more]

@koshka

I also liked the way Leon realizes he’s dying, and that he doesn’t have much time left to work here. The urgency that comes over his actions was real to me.

Oh yeah, I see that. There definitely is an urgency.

And then the whole “you’re crazy but I still kinda admire your attitude” thing was funny, but unfortunately real.

🤣 I like Albe…[Read more]

@liberty

I really like him, and he’s very intriguing. He sounds like a character that could demand an entire book of his own! He reminds me of the monks who bought Squanto.

I was literally thinking, “This guy needs his own book!” while I was editing! 🤣

Oh wow, that’s brutal. But those are the stories I love best!! Stories of REAL s…[Read more]

@koshka

Wow!!!

*sits there and reads with mouth open* I had no idea I did all that!!

BUT ACTUALLY

*clears throat and nods* of course of course… it’s all with the flows of literary design and technique. 😂

It’s actually really cool seeing you lay it out like that, because I had no idea I had done that.

@linus-smallprint

You know what, I was thinking that while I was editing yesterday morning!! 😂

When I hear this name, I think of an old, kindly grandfather.

Um…… you’re off by like 40 years.

I would peg this guy in his late 30s. Maybe early 40s.

It wasn’t too long ago that he was still physically fighting the slave trade, and he was a…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

No soup…….?

*paces around room. Tries to understand why that’s funny. Knows that once it is explained I will remember why it was funny*

@freed_and_redeemed

YAY!!! SCENE!!!

Oh dear. Poor Riker…….. This is a bit of a fix.