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@alia yeah, sure 😉 what are you debating about, if you don’t mind me asking?

@seekjustice *fangirls again*

I’ll be back in about half an hour…

@rochellaine @seekjustice @skredder @kaya-young Anyone wanna write with me?

@skredder I love it!!!  Nice job!

@mnvalentine Thank you for sharing!  I do agree with Elizabeth and Skredder.  It is a little to dull and slow moving, even though its great for establishing some facts.  I like how you described the characters.  Now I am curious to read more. 🙂  I have terrible times with my first chapters too.  So exiting you are so close to publishing!

@seekjustice I finished it! (I pushed off my to do list to finish it because I couldn’t stop 😉 )

I love this so much already! It feels so good to read about these characters again, and I love how Chessy and Justice’s relationship has gotten.

But, uh…………

CLIFFHANGERRRRRRRR!

I am so looking forward to the next part!!! 😀

@skredder ooh, now you’re getting me excited! 😀

@rochellaine lol, your meme is very accurate! 😀

bad girl, @seekjustice, bad girl! Your readers are weeping oceans and you just say we “should have learnt by now”?!

😛

I’m on page 11 right now. Awesomeness so far 😉 I should finish it within the next hour, cuz I had a few other things to take care of (ahem, like my broken heart). 😉

@Dekreel woohooo I love it! *tosses confetti* xP

@SeekJustice @Sam-kowal I’ve actually already got a cabin (plus several other offers, haha) so I’m all good, thanks though! Have fun with the Kapeefer cabin!

@skredder Okay, will do! 🙂

My answers to your questions:

1) I really enjoy the family, so I would keep reading.

2) I think the first line was good because it establishes very soon the close relationship of the family and the lifestyle.

3) So far, I think the characters are consistent 🙂

4) Yup! 😀

It is, definitely. You’ll get it right, though, I know it. 😉

@skredder I read it! I still love this family 🙂 …..

There were only a few little things I commented on. I saw you said that it was supposed to be in Casse’s POV, which I didn’t know; I thought you were doing omniscient POV. I would suggest more following Casse’s action and her thoughts to make it her POV.

I’m looking forward to the next part! 😀

See what I mean about repetition? I had already mentioned my website! :O

If you want to help…

check out my website! If you leave a comment I’d appreciate knowing how I know you. I’ve received several bogus messages on there in the past.

krltalk.witnesstoday.org

@WarrenLuther and @jenwrites17, most of my ideas come from the Bible itself. A verse I read or that was incorporated into a sermon. Even hymns we sing in the service.

Here are a few (titles are my own, but you can change them if you see fit to do so–I do ask that you let me know if you want one of my story ideas so I can remove it from my “list…[Read more]

Okay. I am admittedly new here (the group, as well as KP almost as much).

I wish I could say with enthusiasm that I will truly love and enjoy all of the forums and such. Sadly, that isn’t possible. I get confused pretty easily much of the time. And forums/chat rooms tend to move so fast. Also, is there an alert or something about when I receive a…[Read more]

*sighs*

I hate to say it, but I think your friend was right.

It’s not a bad thing, necessarily. The chapter introduced the family dynamic, and introduces a few things that will (obviously) come into play later in the story, but it doesn’t have a whole lot of oomph–by which I mean, something that draws the reader into the story. There’s…[Read more]

@skredder I’m ready for it any time you’re ready to give it  😉

@seekjustice Yay! I can’t wait to read it! I requested access 🙂