Charityanne

@hybridlore

You’re welcome!

There’s a lot of things I could say in reply, but I think the best thing to do would be spend a long time on worldbuilding. The more worldbuilding you do, the more will become clear, and the world will seem more real to the viewers. I know pantsing if fun, and you can totally do it, but it sounds like it might be…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Ok, thanks! I can stick Felicity in the same room as the twins and some other girls and then I guess Lois can go… somewhere… eh, I’ll figure it out.

I know it’s a long shot, but Marcel might ask one of the twins to the dance. If they get to know each other. He loves origami 😊

That would be so awesome! Origami is Ellie’s favorite…[Read more]

Also, @whalekeeper , I know I’ve asked this a few times already, sorry, but how can I figure out who my character’s roommates are?

@peeps

Ok, here’s my lil alien dudes

Eddie: female, about 14 in human years ish, 3’ tall, green eyes, long brown hair in a French braid, tan skin with some green coloring, long unicorn-like tail, wears a white tank top and dark pants

Ellie: Eddie’s identical twin sister, chin length brown hair, wears a sky blue hoodie

Eddie

Eddie was dying…[Read more]

@grcr

Ooo I love this one and the other character ones you’ve posted! Your story seems really cool.

I should start making mood boards again…

@freedomwriter76

NO! *grabs Riker and Leon* don’t take ma bois from me!!!! I shall give them blankets and coco myself, thank you very much! XD

lol you better 😆

this new 😀 emoji is creeping me out just a lil bit…XD

hehe yeah sometimes my friends use that emoji when they’re trying to be threatening

@freedomwriter76

Those all look so cool!

why are all my charries so saddddd 😭

Well, I don’t know. Do I need to steal them from you so they can have a break and give them each a blanket and cup of hot coco? XD

@rae

Also what kind of things do you most want criticism on? Grammar? Style? Story structure?

I can also just read it and tell you the things I like about it. : )

@rae

Hello!

I’m sorry I didn’t see you tagging me for a while. I finally started reading your story and I’m enjoying it so far, but I’m only halfway through chapter two. I have a really hard time reading the italics and long paragraphs, but I’m not giving up! I’ll give you a longer response later when I finish it.

Thanks for tagging me. Sorry I…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Right, like the internal resolution vs the outward resolution. Sooo, I sort of feel like Katrin doesn’t exactly have her own huge goal. It’s more she’s trying to survive and protect her brother, but I’ve lately realized that she also holds a grudge against the administrators for a few reasons, mostly just because of the living conditi…

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Oh and as long as the rest  of your book is unique it’s alright to have a stereotypical ending. It’s when your book has a love triangle, America as a setting, and rebels taking down the government. If you can add one factor to really mix it up and make it something totally new, it won’t be considered stereotypical (Is it set in England for a…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Oof that’s a hard one XD

For a single novel, I think you do need a defining ending.

Something I have heard about in my research about plots is that there’s two separate goals your character has to reach. One of them is said and known about, such as defeating the government, the other is never mentioned but obvious to the reader.…[Read more]

@euodia-vision

Thank you so much!!

Lol go ahead and use it for a bit if you like! I’m not terribly attached because it was just a sketchy thing XD

@freedomwriter76

Aww it was cute!!

@whalekeeper

Thanks! 😊 I’m really behind on inktober. I think it’s probably just going to turn into inkautumn for me lol.

Ok, I’m exaggerating. It was only a few people and all they did was say the character was creepy and going to give them nightmares. I think it was a month ago maybe? I’m probably just worrying a bit too much about what pe…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium

Thanks!
Lol, yeah, I’m just really cautious on this website now because I remember a bunch of people freaking out when someone posted a picture of a chibi cartoon character from a video game a bit ago. I guess they thought she was creepy because she had pointy teeth?

@euodia-vision ok

So uh slightly creepy warning for all the sensitive people I guess?

The prompt was path.

@smiley @whalekeeper @esther-c @euodia-vision

Ooooo shopping! I totally wanna do that!

But, uh, Felicity probably wouldn’t be too interested. Someone’s gotta convince her.

And we could also have some villain conflict too while we’re waiting for Fan.

Also I’m going to add my alien characters soon if anyone wants to meet them.

@esther-c

Thank you! 🙂

@savannah_grace2009

You’re welcome!

You should totally read them!

The villains are human mutant sorts, who have been turned into lizards. They also elongate ssss’s like your character does!

“These ssstinky humansss” would be a common phrase 🤣

They are a christian fantasy allegory by Andrew Peterson. Themes are great, characters are great, the…[Read more]