Emma Lee C

Also, I was pronouncing “NAAFSI” as “NAFF-Sigh” as opposed to “N-A-A-F-S-I” or “NAFF-See”. I personally like the acronym, so if you do decide to keep it, then maybe you could just have a character(s) refer to “NAAFSI” in dialogue as “Naff-Sigh” or “Sigh” or “Naff” or something. Perhaps the lower-case letters or abbreviations would help people get…[Read more]

Wow! I really like this! I like this genre, and the mystery, and the situation (no parents; no friends, being watched and monitored, etc). I also can personally relate to the MC, and she feels real, which is very good.

I was thinking, though, if it might not be better to open the story with the scene where she is talking to her parents. This is…[Read more]

They did send criminals to New Zealand. I had to make sure of that one. And I now have a pretty good source of information to draw from.

Anyone who had done the smallest bit of crimes could be sent there. Mothers with small children or babies, a child who stole food, etc. So there are more than just that baby as well.

Alisia’s always been a…[Read more]

Good to see you on the forum, Blaine!

World-building definitely is one of the most enjoyable parts of writing. I’m in the middle of my most ambitious world-building/plot planning project yet. Since I have so little time for writing, I figured I would just plan out every single little detail before-hand (a little at a time) and then try and write…[Read more]

Yeah, I think I’m probably the only one here who has public schooled as much as homeschooled. 😛

Good to see you on the forum, Sage!

Hey, Erin! Good to see you on the forum!

I really need to learn guitar or piano. Or both. Just one of those things I keep meaning to do but don’t. >_< I never liked the learning music growing up because all the songs you had to play were like “Mary Had a Little Lamb” and “Hot Cross Buns” and I didn’t like them and they didn’t seem very manly. XD…[Read more]

Some things that came to mind for me:

Did they send criminals to New Zealand? I know they were sent to Australia, but I have never heard of New Zealand. That’s interesting!

Also, if she’s being shipped there as a criminal…why is there a mother with a baby on board too? I’m also curious as to why she became a thief.

And if you’re not sure…[Read more]

Yeah, music is awesome!

And it’s nice knowing someone listens to my music besides me. Haha!

I ALWAYS listen to music when I write. If the music fits the mood I’m trying to create, it conjures up words and pictures that fit what I’m trying to describe. Plus, if I don’t have music, my mind tends to wander and I start thinking about all kinds of things and not writing.

I have started creating different playlists for different novels on…[Read more]

Hi, Shaina! Welcome to the Kingdom Pen forum! Hope you enjoy it here! We’re still pretty small, but more people have been starting to join recently.

It’s cool that you write fantasy! Feel free to post excerpts of anything you would like feedback on in the “critiques” section of the forum. If you have any questions, don’t hesitate to ask. 🙂

Yes you can. One of my sisters is learning it right now. I want to learn it, but don’t have a lot of time. <_<

Glad to help 🙂

Welcome to KP, stalker! Glad you finally figured out our difficult password creation system. You’re in an elite group now. You should be proud. *nods*

My favorite genre to write is futuristic/dystopians too!

If you have an ideas on how the forum can be improved, just let me know or leave a comment in the suggestions topic.

Well I was doing each letter. That could be a voice thing for your MC. How she pronounces it. Maybe it could be a contrast to the way another character says it. As in, maybe she says NAHF-sigh but another character says each letter. Just a thought. I’m not sure if it matches with your story or not.

Well no. It feels more like a narration. I feel…[Read more]