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@ellette-giselle

Omc where do you find all these quotes? I love them!

@ellette-giselle

Oops I forgot to mention that I deleted the scene with her not wanting to talk to the Great One…so now it’s just the scene with her and Lilitu pretending to be animals.

I really liked it so I put it into the “scene recycling bin” if I need it again, but for now it’s not in the draft.

@everyone

Sixth Chapter!!!

Chapter 6

A Voice

Lir stretched out as far as the eye could see-the crown jewel of Andromeda, the pride of the Pythonos.

Sef stood on the hilltop, overlooking the city, taking in the sights and smells as if she were starving, though she knew she’d never be able to partake in the beauty of it all.

Paynes w…[Read more]

@esther-c

I honestly don’t know XD

Here’s the link you can use (but there’s not a lot of “new chapters”…and the first couple “new” chapters need a lot of redoing, but you can read ahead if you want! Just keep in mind that if you critique them, I’ve seen a lot of the problems already. The new chapters I’m talking about are…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Aww tysm girl that means a lot!!!

And so true!!!!!!

@esther-c

Livia

“I’m an Aquino,” she shrugged. “I was born with it.”

She formed a miniature waterspout over her hands and watched it whirl, then letting it fall into a small puddle at her feet.

@ellette-giselle

Oh no! I’m so sorry again…

I need to spend some time with my sister, we’re about to do a Bible study!

I feel sooo bad, but I have to go….I’m sorry!

It’s writing nonstop until whatever time you set. Like I usually go for fifteen to thirty minutes, and write about 1-2K words if I get enough inspiration.

If you want, you can…[Read more]

@grcr

Aww thanks girl <3

@ellette-giselle

Don’t be sad!!!! I only thought of it because the whole scene felt winter and cold and dead to me. Like those feelings just mirrored Sef’s. It was you writing her so well that made me think of it. Actually, the other day i was thinking, “Man, she is so good! Look at hers compared to mine!” lol.

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@ellette-giselle

Oh no I’m so sorry…I didn’t see this!!!

Could we maybe still do it now??

I understand if you can’t XD

@ellette-giselle

I like that!!!!!!

YES I WOULD LOVE TO SEE THE COVER

@ellette-giselle

I would love to! I don’t know if I’ll have much time but I’ll try!

@jonas

Yeah, you could do them as separate chapters, and that should work. But also, be careful about waiting too long before launching into the bulk of the story. I don’t believe we’ve even reached the inciting incident yet, and you don’t want the reader to be thinking “let’s just get on with it!” You probably still have a little bit of wiggle r…

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@ellette-giselle

Ok, that was just a cringe for me me because of the way our country is trying to use that to justify some really horrid stuff. What if the line was,

“No, not like me,” Cass laughed. “Be like the Great One, Birdie.”

After all, Christ is our example.

Good point. I wasn’t trying to copy the people who are like “be yourself” or “fol…[Read more]

@jonas

Okay! I was just playing around with the idea of jumping ahead as quickly as possible yet keeping a few similarities. So should I made each it’s own chapter after adding more to it?

I could use them as flashbacks!

But idk, I also like them in my book…I have to think about that.

@grcr (CASSIAN SCENE ALERT) @ellette-giselle @esther-c @rae @jonas @whalekeeper @highscribeofatherium

This scene isn’t really edited either…

But let me know if it makes sense AT ALL

Chapter 5

Birdie

“I love birds,” Sef sang as she spread her arms wide, mimicking the birds soaring overhead, silhouetted against the bright blue sky.

She lov…[Read more]

@anyone

Dropping the fourth chapter!! <3 my favorite I’ve ever written

It’s not edited so excuse any grammar/stupid mistakes XDXD

Chapter Four

A Wedding

“Where are we going, Mani?” Sef asked for the umpteenth time since they’d left the house.

“Wait and see,” Neveah smiled down at her. Sef pouted, but kept skipping, jumping over even the…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I get up at around six! (so seven your time) Maybe if I got up at 5:30, I could read my Bible and then still have time to write before work!

Of course that would also mean going to bed at a decent hour…like at 9 PM?!?!? That’s so early but I need to start going to bed earlier…so you could be my bedtime accountability partner XD XD

@ellette-giselle

So, what is your opinion on the end? should I leave it unknown like it is?

I think you should show Julius accepting Jesus, and end it at that. Because I really want to know if he chose right or not! But if you like it more the way you have it then keep it!

Thank you so much for the advice you gave. I hope I was able to i…

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@ellette-giselle

Ohhh so you’re an hour ahead!!!

yeahh I’m 100% A LATE NIGHT PERSON…I once stayed up until almost 11 trying to write an outline XD

What time do you get up to write?