CanadaLily

@ellette-giselle

I know you’re probably busy…but would you like to help me and give me some tips on some of my writing as well?? We could be critique partners, if you’re up for that!

@trailblazer

Girl your suggestions were good, though! I haven’t done much research on starting off a book, so it sounds like you have more tools under your belt in that area than I do.

Thank you! That’s good, I guess…xD

@ellette-giselle

I still think you should keep the fountain scene! I loved that! Just maybe put it after the Colosseum? M…[Read more]

@trailblazer

Lol! XD

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, sorry if I went a little overboard on the critiques lol

I know I’m not the best at giving advice…sorry

@trailblazer

Yeah that’s basically what happened xD

glad I’m not the only one!

@ellette-giselle

Yeah…I bet you two will get along just fine XDXDXD

@trailblazer

Ok I love what savannah_grace2009 just said about doing the whole colosseum scene first- that makes a lot of sense!

*sighs in relief* Okay because I was panicking after I posted and then you posted that you really liked the fountain scene…I felt sooo bad lol

Yeah, I overthink a lot xD

As far as the fountain scene, I think you could…

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@highscribeofaetherium

It was really weird for like ten minutes, now it’s normal…😐

@elette-giselle
Okay…so I’m going to attempt to give my thoughts.
Just so you know…I haven’t been writing for THAT long…so take everything with a grain of salt…
I just feel bad giving feedback for some reason xD

First…your revisions did help a lot (I read both the first draft and second rewrite).
But the new opening scene felt a…[Read more]

Is it just me or did KP glitch out???? Like everything looks SUPER WEIRD

@ellette-giselle

I haven’t come across anything with Leon, Riker, sand Hans that people died in. am I missing something?

Leon, Riker, and Hans are Freedom’s characters from her novels. She posts really, really, really sad scenes from her books in the forums (usually The Chat Chat) that make @rae cry…(actually they make a lot of us cry :/)

YES T…[Read more]

@rae

Chase is so adorable <3

I am officially a member of the Chase protection squad.

Sef

She laughed. “Thank you,” she said to the bird, lightly stroking it with her finger.

@rae

Sef

“We don’t have to talk about it anymore right now,” she said, sensing he was overwhelmed. “But if you ever want to talk about any of that stuff, I’m here.”

@elette-giselle @freed_and_redeemed

post scenes and break hearts. That’s what I do. And I do it very well, if I do say so myself😝

Yes.

You do.

💔😢

@rae

Sef

Please give me the words, she sent a silent prayer up to the heavens.

“His son chose to die for us. He didn’t have to…but He wanted to!” her eyes shone. “But he didn’t stay dead! After three days, He rose again!” She thought about Chase’s other question. “My father abandoned me and my mani when I was four. I had the same ques…[Read more]

@trailblazer

Oh wow, your camp sounds so much fun! And wayyy different from ours lol!

Ours is kind of in the middle of nowhere…you’d never expect a camp to be there!

It depends on who is directing the camp that week what kind of teams we have,  but normally we are split up into about four to six teams of different colors. Each team has about…[Read more]

@rae

Sef

“The Great One is what my people call “God”, or “Yahweh”. He created everything,” Sef began. “He created us, and the universe! But then a great darkness overcame the world, and the people living in it. To save us from ourselves, the Great One sent His Son to die in our place! He wants to have a relationship with us, even though we make…[Read more]

@esther-c

Livia

She wiped her eyes, determined to not let another tear fall.

“I haven’t prayed in a while,” she smiled bitterly. She shook her head. “I’m not even sure He hears me anymore. I just feel so…lost.”

@esther-c

Yes yes yes!!!!!!!

lol that’s so funny though!

Livia

She closed her eyes as he wrapped his arms around her.

But she felt numb.

All she felt was hurt…so much hurt…

“We had to sell Xandro,” all her attempts to keep from crying failed, and she let out a sob. “We had to sell everything and move to the poor district,” she leaned…[Read more]