CanadaLily

Ottoline

She took a deep breath and closed her eyes to clear her thoughts. Reaching for her best arrow, she drew it back, sighting down the shaft at the bull’s eye. She felt the others’ eyes on her, but she could only concentrate on her task at hand. And then she let go. The arrow sped through the air…and landed in the target. It wasn’t in the…[Read more]

Oki doki!

Like who can hit the target with the most accuracy

@jonas

They could have a “duel” of sorts to prove who is better…

@jonas

Do you want to start or shall I? (I don’t really have any ideas…so if you do go ahead)

@jonas

Well i think where we left off, Ottoline was terrified of Ellis (as usual) and she was setting up targets to practice, and Ellis and Snake were talking about what weapons they can use.

@esther-c

That’s so cool! That would be fun!

@highscribeofaetherium

Lol your new profile pic is so confusing. I keep thinking you’re GRCR 😂

Same!!! I thought I was the only one, lol

@fernweh_grace

Of course!

@jonas

okay, sounds good.

@jonas

I feel like I just went…XD Rae went too…so I think its either you or HighScribe’s turn. Unless you really don’t want to, lol

@esther-c

I’m glad I was able to help!

@fernweh_grace

I happened to stumble upon this by chance….and I’m glad I did! Your writing is beautiful! It’s so sad….but beautiful! (you should publish this…)

@esther-c

I read the chapter, and I think I see what you mean.

I wouldn’t say that your problem is the lack of action. I think the way you opened with the painting scene is a great introduction. It introduces Ami’s character, how she’s artistic, what she values, what kind of person she is. So it definitely doesn’t need more action. The way you…[Read more]

Just kidding, I’ll start at :55. I have to get pumpkin pie first, lol.

@jonas @thearcaneaxiom @highscribeofaetherium

*sighs* Okay, I changed my mind again.

I’m not doing first person (you’re welcome, Jonas, lol).

But I am in a sense, starting over.

Before you freak out, let me explain.

I’m still keeping the original beginning (Elysium, Pythonos, A Swift Death, A Thief, Gone, Stolen, and An Orphan). So bas…[Read more]

@esther-c

Ugh, sorry you’re going through that! That’s hard!

Could you maybe post some segments of it so I can see more of what you mean?

All I can say is that maybe you’re focusing a little too much on all the potential problems. (I’m speaking from experience) Sometimes you need a little break, or maybe you’re overthinking it. If its boring to…[Read more]

I’m gonna do a sprint, i’ll probably start at :50 and end at :20 or something like that, if anyone wants to join.

@jonas

Yeah, I think just adding villains to this one will work.